Let me take this rope and tie you to the bed
let me get ontop of you and do whatever I want
I start with your hands and tie them to the corners
I go down to the legs and tie them as well
You start breathing harder not knowing whats to come, not being able to move
I move back up and start with a kiss slipping my hands ontop your breasts ever so lightly
As we kiss I move my hands lower, your body trembling, you feel my fingers and start to moan
I move my hand back up and you beg for more, then I take a candle that was sitting on the floor
The hot wax slowly drips between your breasts and down your body
You gasp in surprise feeling the heat, but you don't mind
The wax trickles down between your legs it hurts enough just to make you squirm
I get back ontop of you and slowly push in
Light gentle thrusts at first, hearing you moan for more
I push faster and faster knowing that you cant move and knowing you like it
I take you over the edge and fall with you as you call my name knowing that you will always be mine
Author notes
This is my second erotica, enjoy!
Written August 6th, 2006
What did you think
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Well, it's easy to see how you got so many comments on this poem, it's very yummy and warm feeling
I love the ending too, adds alot to the poem then if it had ended any other way. Anyways... loved it!
"I take you over the edge and fall with you as you call my name knowing that you will always be mine"
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Wow, the wax was so sensual
It... uuuhhh, nvm.
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This was a good write.....Led the reader down a nice tantalizing moment between two people.......
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Very good. And is a good way to spice up a marriage.
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Hot wax....now that is sexy
Well done sensual piece
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ugh its so not fair all the good men with good minds are taken lol great write
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This is a good example of the benefits of a very healthy relationship.
This is well written. Relationships that last the longest are those that shed the inhibitions that tend to creep their way into the bedroom early on. As long as there is complete trust and a "safe word," this is a wonderful experience between two people, and definitely has the added benefit of adding spice to something that often just turns into nothing more than a chore that couples occasionally do when they have time. Bravo!
Don
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very nice
erotic write here... if you wished to change things up a bit, try taking "I" out after the first couple, as in I Get, I push, I take....the last line for instance could be Taking you over the edge and fall with you.....etc.... other than that not much to change on this hot write, depends on what you really want as well...besides, to tie her to the bed. cheers!
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that's hot!!! i wouldn't change a thing...
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dark, sexy
it was very dark and sexy. honestly iam speechless, it was very good, the discription was good, could use more detail though
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ok this was pretty good.. I see it was written quite some time ago so I wont go on about metaphors and all that garbage. Good write
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Awesome poem!! Wow, this is hot!!
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nice
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this is an awesome poem just like your an awesome person. i loved your poem its inspiring and well written. i enjoyed the whole thing it is good imagery
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loved it!
seriously
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Good write if your trying to write porno.lol
just kidding.
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I like this poem. It turned me on a little.
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I am new to this site and this is the first truly erotic poem I have read here. The emotions are strong.
Great imagery. I may have to read this several times!!
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kids act like you invented sex=) I have to smile. nice sounds like you are giving directions to an age old technique
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Finally! I like this poem! It shows the 'gentle-ish' side to bondage and hot wax. ^-^ I think this is an excelent erotic poem, and I would never have known this was your second one...Well done! You have talent. ^-^
Luna
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that was really hot! damn!
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I take you over the edge and fall with you as you call my name knowing that you will always be mine
amazing is all i can say love love love that line. keep it up i like reading your erotica poems they make me hot
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loving
Hello again.
This is a romantic, erotic and loving poem. iT'S VERY SEXY AND SEEMS LIKE A FUN THING TO DO; IT ALSO SHOWS THAT THE TWO PEOPLE IN THE POEM ARE TRUSTING OF EACH OTHER, AND THAT GIVES ME A WARM GLOW.
I'm trying to write some poetry like this as well, so it's good to read yours.
I hope you don't mind some suggestions.
I start with your hands and tie them to the corners
I go down to the legs and tie them to the corners as well
I'm not sure you need the words "to the corners" in the second line. What do you think?
In the wonderful line below, do you need the word 'to'?
You gasp in surprise to feeling the heat, but you don't mind
A wonderful poem. Well done!
BJ.
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Wow that was hot. The candles and the dripping of wax is really hot. It would hurt but having you there to kiss away the pain would make it all worth it
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This is an awesome poem. Being tied down.. the candles... hell yeah... awesome job.
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Good
This is really great. I think it's okay anyway. It's new for me...not easy for me to get used to. But for what it is, it's pretty good. -
Hmmm... it seems like many people liked this poem. as did I. Someone said this wasn't very erotic (but her comment got deleted cough cough), but for your second attempt, as someone ELSE said, I think this is great. I had to read it and comment again.
~Bri <3
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Wow, that was hot! If this is only a second attempt, then... Well, damn! Keep it up, my friend, and I look forward to hearing more from you.
Take care!
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I take you over the edge and fall with you as you call my name knowing that you will always be mine
Hmm..very thought provoking and so challenging end here..Although a great expression here..
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Wow ii bet a lot of people got caught up iin the tiitle. Great attentiion getter and then the poem was amaziing also. Wow you are really good. You reel them iin and then giive them a run for theiir money. Great job wiith thiis poem, iit iis an awesome piiece of art work. ii look forward to readiing more of your poetry iin the very near future. But untiil then keep up the good work!!
Soon to be queen but for now stiill the...
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Very erotic write... Got me all hot n bothered... Keep up the good work... looking to read more of it... Daithian
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wow! that was great! i love it! you very talented i hope you keep putting out lol you on my favs list!
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:-O oh my god and i thought i was the only one that liked the kinky stuff when it came to sex but i guess not damn i loved this ooo being tied up and burned with a candle just makes me want my baby damn u are good cant say this enough I LOVE THIS u r so good at this please dont stop writing and thanks for sharing i will read more soon...lots of love from yours Truely
+Pixie Fairy+;
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Bondage and candlewax!Sounds like a long night if this were real.Keep up the good writing,I entered in another song bye the way. -Brad
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i thought it was wonderful. i like the whole tieing of the ropes. its good how u didnt go too deep into describing the details, it let me imagine them on my own. keep up the writing.
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keep at it
This kind of poetry was new for me to read, but I liked it, and you should continue to write and strengthen the great writing that you already have.
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fantastic reading
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Very arousing! I can't believe this is only your second attempt. You apparently have mastered this form of poetry. Peace be with you.
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amazing. you did such a good job describing some parts better than others but didnt go into great details on oen part but thats find. some times thats better than detail.
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WOW..this was great. The imagery was right on....Great read and wonderful work.
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Very very well done!
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hot
oh my god. this is so hot. I loved it and keep up the writing. You truly give a great read with every post. Have fun.
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