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Love and Potential

If we all
loved generously
We'd have
no problems
As of now
We're jealous
EVIL! Creatures
Evil in the most
Vicious and vivacious ways

Why do we insist
On such things
Saving love for 1
And no one but

We all fear
love and loss
What if loss wasn't
In this equation
We would only love
Love,
Brings out
the best in all of us
Infinite potential
We fear it
being in each other
We keep all we can
For ourselves

Imagine no fear of loss
Imagine infinite potential
We could all do this
but only if
we love and believe
in each other

Author notes

This is a twin poem to Potential and Love
Written August 6th, 2006

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  • masky
    April 10, 2008

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    This is a very beautiful poem, which I have enjoyed to bits. You actually made some good point through the lines, but you know what bothered me? I couldn't quite read it well! I had to highlight some bits to understand. I would suggest a brighter colour (like a cream, or beige) for the writing. This, as a first. Then, there was these lines...
    "Saving love for 1
    And no one but"
    I think that instead of "but", "else" would go better in that place. But besides that, great job! Thank you for entering and good luck!


  • Crazy-Dan
    October 10, 2006
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    its a great read infront of a church, i've done so myself, as its understood by almost all, and the pastor can easily build off it.

  • Mickie27
    October 10, 2006
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    I really like the way you wrote this it speaks clearly and wisely of how we could make changes if only we loved each other. It is a very artistic write and is easy to read and understand.


  • Goodolenad
    August 7, 2006
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    the twin poem thing, nice touch. it adds to it. to the art of it. nice write.


  • The-Daydreamer
    August 7, 2006
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    well done with the poem and gud luck in my contest.

  • Thedragonisgone
    August 6, 2006
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    Good luck with the contest. twin poem -- have to say I haven't heard of that before...


  • Crazy-Dan
    August 6, 2006
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    the world could see, help me spread the word...
    Thank you, for the comment, btw.


  • innocentsoul
    August 6, 2006
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    I like it. Very lovely, if only everyone else in this world could see. :/
    ♥ Lacey

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