walking inch by inch down that empty hallway for probably my last time
I headed towards that bathroom door.
razor in my left pocket.
I walked into that bathroom heart now racing and checked under every stall door
so I creaked open the stall door and walked in and sat down
now breaking out in a cold sweat and pacing back and forth on the ground
I decided that i was still determined to do this
So......
I pulled out the razor out of my left pocket and started cutting my knuckles for practice
So then by now my mind was racing with the thoughts of just everything my life, the people in it everything
I took a deep breathe and let out a large sigh
then i began making cuts on my wrists starting out small at first
as my heart beated faster
and then i thought i heard someone coming so i thought id put the razor away
but in the process of putting it away i slit my wrist very deeply
the coast was clear and blood was trickling to the floor
no time to clean it up though
so i said to myself there is no stopping me now
please help me lord
i began sawing away at my wrists
and i mean sawing
I then decided to pull up my braclets and use them as a tourniquet to let the blood flow to be faster
i just kept sawing and sawing till ...
i saw them
i saw my veins
and i let out wicked laughter
by that time the blood was now on my blue polo and all over the tips of my chuck taylors and the floor
pouring and oozing out of the very deep cut i made
the blood was now splattering all over the stall door as it bounced from the floor
I then got really cold as i just kept on sawing
the veins were next
i yelled out calling
i took that razor and took it and cut one of my veins in two
Oh my God what had i just done
i couldn't stop though it was like a maniac had taken over
so then as i grew weak and fell to the floor i prayed someone would find me
and sure enough my best friend came walking in the door seen me the blood screamed
and then walked over to me
held my hand
took the razor out of my grasp and then began slitting her own wrists
we always told each other you jump I jump
and i knew what she was doing so i tried to grab it from her but i couldn't move a bit
I felt so helpless just watching my friend die
she made her cuts just as I did by sawing
then she said I love you
and gave me a kiss goodbye
and when she did that that was all i needed to know
and then i decided that i just needed to let go
she died almost instantly after me.
we died holding hands plain for anyone to see
the world had been so cruel to us both
shooting us down when we were weak
but now we were both gone and didn't have to worry about it.
we were found 10 minutes later
and the people who found us couldn't believe us
our families took it the hardest
crying and had to deal with the sadness
but everyone knew that we would go through rough thick or thin together
and that we were the best of friends through all of it
so maybe in heaven we will truly find what we want and what we need
I am glad i seen such i pretty sight
the night that i was relieved
to everyone I'm sorry
I had to commit
suicide.
but i was so happy to find love that day that I died.
Author notes
I would like to be a sister or a cousin if i get chosen
i only have 1 person 2 my family right now
so i'd enjoy having another even if i dint win
Written August 6th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Poems Stained With Tears by TommyTRASH.
300 points, ended November 3, 2006, 47 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Cutters, Bleeders & Blood covered chocolate by Devilish Temptation.
600 points, ended August 10, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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i love this.! its so...wow
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u r my ap sister now okay
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okay =F sounds good to me I shall put your link on my page you can be my brother then
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wow this is really good
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wow what a sad write. So full of pain and feeling. I have to say though if you have to go 'tis better to not have to go alone
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This just made me feel your pain. Wow. The emotion is so deep. I actually got goosebumps with this "took the razor out of my grasp and then began slitting her own wrists
we always told each other you jump I jump
and i knew what she was doing so i tried to grab it from her but i couldn't move a bit
I felt so helpless just watching my friend die". Tears actually came to my eyes. Very powerful
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wow this is intense and powerful I'm speechless you blew me away thanks you very much for your delightful moving piece and good luck
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babe you broke my limit by about 70 im sorry but your DQ i love this though anyways sorry but rules are rules
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really strong and very emotional,powerful piece
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i really love this poem...it made me cry...i have been through similar things and the same thoughts...this is really good...if you are the same as this in real life then i hope you get help because if you were to die then there would be alot of talent wasted...i really think your great
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This is great! i could feel my heart pumping faster as i read, i could see it perfectly! this is really really good, keep it up
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This piece is so haunting, I could picture myself the one paralyzed on the floor, watching my friend go after me. Really good job. I applaud this.
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I have read this poem 3 times. It is so haunting to me. I am a cutter and Always wanted to cut to death.Im always thinking of overdosing(for the second time) and then cutting my skin raw so that there is no chance i survive, but i will never attempt it again."Sawing" Is a really good word to use. It gives you a real idea of the pain and sorrow you go through as you cut your life away.Gives me chills just thinking aobut it.I can just pitcute a young girl sitting in a bathroom stall in a big bathroom, with a average sized knife, slicing her wrists.Beautiful write. I love work that I feel I am part of. Thanks for the good read. I truly hope you win. You derserve it. Lots of work went into this piece i am sure.
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Wow This poem was so beautiful.Kept me on the edge of my seat waiting for what was to come next.You have a very interesting piece here.The words were so descriptive,I felt like I was there watching.This write is amazing.Keep up the awesome work.Thanx for entering.
Good Luck
God Bless
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good poem its beutiful to know maybe evne in death we are not alone
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