A ripple murmurs through the church
The band begins to play
And suddenly she appears
Her presence brightening the day
Draped in white silk, and alabaster lace
Christine, the blushing bride
Her form swaying gracefully
She approaches, with a fluid stride
You remember all the times you’ve shared
You remember laughter and tears
All these memories come back to you
Collected throughout the years
You dreamed of the day
You’d take her as your own
When you’d be united forever
And since, your love has only grown
You understand her every wish
And know her every heart’s desire
She has seen into your deepest soul
And her love has set it afire
For a moment now, as she draws near
Her eyes light on you
The graceful touch of blessed dove
And hot steel piercing you through
Your breath catches in your throat
As you bask in her graceful light
And as her aroma fills you
You long to take her and hold her tight
To feel her body against your own
To sense the rampant beating of her heart
To feel her lips on your own
And such desires tear you apart
Then, in an instant, her gaze slips away
Releasing you from the spell it cast
And gliding, she passes you by
And you can breathe again, at last
Yet sorrow fills you deeply
Even as you regain your breath
For the sunlight has passed you by
And all that awaits you is death
Turning, you watch, and feel your heart break
As Christine goes to the alter
And as she takes the hand of her love
Your heart and breath both falter
All your dreams have fallen to dust
And as their oaths are sworn
You lament the joy you cannot have
You are alone, lost, and Forlorn
All your joy has passed away
The day has turned to night
Your only love is lost to you
To that which you couldn’t fight
Your own secrets and shadows
Were what brought you to this day
Are what bind you to your silence
As your love gives her heart away
And so, as kisses are exchanged
And the crowd begins to cheer
You turn and leave the revelry
Betrayed by a single tear
“I’ll love you, Christine, forever”
you say, around a throat grown tight
And fighting your grief you fade away
Into loneliness and night
“I’ll love you Christine, Forever”
you speak, and lay a rose on her grave
“I have loved you Christine, since always”
“And forever I’ve been your slave”
“And in my heart you were my wife”
“My beloved, my one and only”
“And though I lament losing you to another”
“I do not lament, that you were never lonely”
Author notes
Please comment! I worked hard on this poem and i would really like to know what people think of it, as it is on a subject that i am unfamiliar with (I like writing about Battles and heroes and all, blast it!) so i am in rather unfamiliar waters..... I bet no one can guess my secret inspiration for this poem... or maybe you can, it is not overly disguised, though it does veer from the origional story line somewhat.... I know some of you might find this rather depressing, but i think it is only right to balance out other, more successful sorts of love with a tragic love of some sort... and there you have it... and if you are still awake, i'm done now.
Written May 6th, 2006
A contest entry
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What did you think
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Inspired by the phantom of the opera? Didn't care for that movie actually, but I see the similiarties.
Again, the flow seemed slightly rough in spots, but this was fantastic! Really moving.
As it started, my feelings were bittersweet. I thought she walking down the aisle towards the man it is centered around and I was thinking to myself about my lost love how I thought that would come true for me. Then as I read on, I see it did not even come true for him!
Touched me deeply!
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*Stutter*
wow, this write was amazing. i was holding my breath. (for some reason) -
Glorious
This makes me happy... I think your inspiration for this piece may have been a little Phantom Of the Opera...? Am I right? lol Great job I didn't see the ending coming at all! xoxoxo Shonda
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Very sad. It worked on me... I loved the rhyme and form. Great work. Thank you for entering!! Good luck.
~Krys~
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Really interesting write here. I enjoyed reading this. It's so cute but it's really long. It made my eyes water. Keep up the good work.
Love always,
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This was an awesome write! it was kinda long, but it brought a tear to my eye! It really was great! Keep up the great work!
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wow, that took some reading, good poem though, i can see you've put a lot of work into this and it's paid off for you, good imagery and very well written,
well done and good luck in the contest,
kind regards,
floorboards
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THAT WAS CRAZY!!!!!!!!!!! OMG DAMN! That was great, I love this piece! So well written, such a great story, great job. YOur heard work paid off big time.
Good luck
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Wow, this is a good one. I like all the references to 'Phantom'. It's beautiful. Well done!
~Lissa -
Delictable
by and far my favorite. I thought the beginning was a bit simplem in of the fact I had seen many like it. also an odd meter through me a loop but it refocused it pulled together beautfully in the next stanza
further that I am into someone named christine right now.
I hope my thoughts dont drown out how much I like this one!
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so beautiful yet so sad
long but definitely good. I absolutely love love the line..."betrayed by a single tear". bittersweet. I like the twist in the ending... even though it made my heart sank... I actually felt something so much kudos for that. Great job. Thanks for entering my contest =) -
A very powerful and haunting poem! Loved the imagery you used. There was a lot of emotion in this piece which gave the poem depth and understanding into the emotions of those you were writing about. Brilliant!
Kiran -
wow... that was awesome. the words that you used in this piece were amazing. they added such depth to the poem and i loved that. it was so deep and emotional and heartfelt. thabk you for entering and good luck.
-apelia-
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