Love has come into their lives
and flown them to another place.
You're left behind, all alone,
looking at the empty space.
No longer do they need you,
to be there every day,
to laugh with, or to talk to,
to help and sometimes lead the way.
Suddenly you don't really matter
as much as you thought you did before.
A backward glance, a little smile,
they leave and gently close the door.
Author notes
This is about kids (and friends) when they fall in love and suddenly become slightly selfish and self-centered, unexpectedly excluding you and all else from their lives.
Written August 6th, 2006
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Perfectly worded
Long before I hit your author's notes, I knew exactly what you were talking about. Our nest is fast becoming empty. We only have one left at home. It is bittersweet ... you've arrived, it's done, they're happy and off on their own, but you've invested 20 years of your life into them ... you don't have anyone to tuck in and kiss goodnight anymore, nobody wants a bedtime story, There are no softball games to go to anymore, nobody asks about boys anymore, they don't even need money to do anything anymore (Okay, I haven't quite gotten there yet
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I suddenly have all this free time, but I've forgotten what to do in free time. I'm re-discovering the wonderful woman who has shared my life and our children ... but when we go out together, we still miss our kids, and always think of places we should return with them sometimes.
Your poem is wonderful, and really hits home with those of us with kids growing up (or grown up). Great write!
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I knew immedietly what you were talking about. My mom frequently bemoans the fact that I am the last child to leave the house, but so far I haven't left due to her hard grasp. I try not to exclude her and my father from my life but... they sure do drive me nuts. especially since they do not approve of my bf... He isn't a drinker or smoker. He only got in trouble once and that will never happen again but it's what made him sober up. He's changed his entire life around for me and they don't see that...
*sigh* am I defending myself here or my boyfriend?
Good job with the poem, you really got the point across.
~Sarah
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Just read this again. Hey come visit me in Aus. You will always be welcome.
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brilliant
this makes me feel like a parent who is watching his/her daughter get married and leave him/her, ita has a touch of sadness to it but acceptance as well, i think it is very well written and each verse flows into the next...
it could only be called art
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If this means what I think it means, then I am so sorry to hear it. I hope I am wrong. Well done dear friend this is great.
Jan -
I knpw what you mean. When p[eople are in love. They forget everyone and everything exccept themselves. I had this happen to me with several friends of mine. I am the one that is left out.
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How true - so often this happens, not that they mean to ignore friends, it's just that they are so engrossed in each other, no one else seems to matter for a while. Ah, true love -
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Lacyte
here are my thoughts on this poem: The meaning is quite clear, but you start out with a pretty big abstraction that is hard to get over. Although your poem conveys your point well, it is nothing new, or fresh, and most importantly it gives the reader nothing real to bite into. It's as if I were to read a teenagers diary, journal, or letter to the intended. I think some concrete similes, analogies, symbols, metaphors, or comparisons would really help the reader(me). Or, just ignore me and kick me to the curb. -
good
i like your poem
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i really liked it...it had great flow...as i look at it i think love is very selfish if u get what im saying...that is what i thought of when i read this poem...plus that is what i really think also
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I liked it, except I think the end was a little weak, and could be changed to make the poem all the better. I think you seem to be a promising poet, but right now your poetry still needs a little work.
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I liked this. It definately speaks the truth a lot of people would rather not face. Nice job.
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A+
Hey! I just wanted to let you know that I read your poem and I thought that it had an excellent flow to it! I would of enjoyed it alot more if you had of written more...it was just so beautifully written...keep up the great writing! -
So true my friend thisis soo true.
Great job i loved it the flow of this piece was great.
Take care and
Keep writing.
God Bless you
Stuner -
Too true.. I had a close friend of mine recently do this and it hurts to feel like you don't really mean as much as you used to think. Nicely expressed.. I especially like the second stanza for some reason. Good job
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I Hate it when that happens.> I read this thinking of one of my ex's but then who wouldn't nice read.
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It's tough lettin go...BTDTGTTS...been there done that got the T-shirt...
GREAT write beautiful dirge to indepence from the other side of the coin of life.. -
Very nice write, and I've seen a little of that myself, from some of our five. But, they were really a tiny bit older when they "fell in love" and we were ready for them to go, lol. But, we sure did seem to suddenly be forgotten and ignored. I guess I was like that too, way back then.
Paul -
Oh I have been through this with both my children. They are adults now and on their own..but it was hard when they acted as you described. A wonderful, honest and insightful piece. Great write.
Soulful Woman -
I admire you for admitting this...that you see that selfishness. Yeah, I've been there a time or two, though I don't think I've ever been the offender. It makes me wonder just why their feelings aren't like mine...then again I think everyone should be like me, lol.
I am assuming this is based on experience...send me the names and I'll kick some sense into their butts fot you. (well, my brains are in my butt anyway)
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