Can you be my nightmare
Will you take me and become my fear,
and feed my tormented soul
Comfort me with blood and tears,
Will you stay at my side on these dark nights,
So I am not alone...
(Shhhhhhh)
Just kiss me, kiss me til it bleeds
I want to feel pain ( I want your Pain)
Push me over the edge
Take me to your world of misery,
Where tears of pain flow endlessly.
Comfort me with blood and tears,
As I bite my delicate crimson lips
I feel my pain spilling
savoring the taste of my blood
Experiencing the pleasure of pain
with every drop
Needing, Wanting,
Beckoning you to share
my deep, darkened soul.
Comfort me with your blood and tears.
Author notes
Written August 6th, 2006
A contest entry
- ~*Fantasy*~ by Lauren Noir.
500 points, ended September 7, 2006, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Vampires and Blood! by okadadokie.
500 points, ended February 23, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wicked sweet! And totally Twisted! I like how you used many describing feelings, like pain, fear, ect. Great job. Good luck.
~Oka
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thank you
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wow. Really chilling. I like it!
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Ahhh, I really liked this. I loved the darkness in it. It worked really well, everything about it had an edge and a certain beauty about it
Very well done and thanks for entering
Good luck
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This is an awesome poem. It was written with such love. Even though it was a dark piece you also added some happiness to it. Keep up the awesome poetry!!! Thank you for entering my contest.
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Thank you. I am working on another one as we speak. Go to page and listen Bloody Thoughts www.myspace.com/darkinstance Thats my lyircs and I have the poem publisehed here its Called Blue eyes/Bloody Thoughts. It will be on Cd the 15th. Listen to it and tell me what you think.
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Wow, I love it! Decent dark poetry is the best kind, and this is a truly absorbing piece, dark, disturbing, mysterious and leaves the reader wanting to know more!
Harsh that you got disqualified because it needed highlighting - dear God its not a long piece, and would be well worth her time. Hmmmm, think you should use your fangs to bite her...then you could use that as real-life inspiration for your next poem!!
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I am sorry about that. On my other computer it shows up and can read it just fine. No one told me you had to high light it to read it LIke I said On my lap top it comes in great. Thanks any ways and I will be sure to make it where it stands out more. When you hold another contest I will enter agin. And This poem is being made in to a song as well. I am Glad you liked it. I have read some or your work and im impressed with it for you being what 16 or 17 I think. Keep up the great work.
Edited on Aug 10, 10:35 because 'wasn't done writing hit wrong button'. -
Well met-
I really liked this piece, but I will most unfortunately not be considering it for placement due to the fact I could not read it without hilighting it. I feel bad about this, because I feel that this would have placed had I been able to read it. Very fine poem, however, and I thank you for following the rules and putting the phrase in your authors box. I have had to disqualify sever people for failing to do that. Please consider entering my future contests, I was very impressed by this piece.
May your fangs stay ever sharp-
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Thank you. Yes its out there and I think its one of my better poems. And if all goes well it will made into a song soon. If you get a chance click on the myspace link at the bottom of the poem and go listen to Bloody Thoughts I wrote the lyircs to that. AS for the contest Thank you and If I win I win If I don't I am ok with that to. I just like my work to be read.
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this was a crazy poem. i thought that this was awesome and i wish you the best of luck in the contest. i saw it and i was meaning to enter but i didnt get the chance to.
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yes it is It was wriiten for a friend of mine as you seen. I have been infatuated with thenight for a long time and It was about time I wrote something like this. Its now being made into a song by the guy I wrote it for.
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i really like it.
THis is supposed to be about vampires correct? Well, you wrote about them particularly well if it is... not the cliche shit you always read from other poets who try to write about these creatures. The Emotions you displayed were just awesome. Go you! -
Wow this was a really good poem i really liked how the raw emotion just flowed through it, great work, I really can't wait to read more poems by you and if i may ask would you please read my newest poem "Demons in Me" at www.allpoetry.com/poem/2164933
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