The models these days make me sick,
All tiny and thin, they look like a stick.
So what if I'm round in all the wrong places,
I still have a life and still can turn faces.
Us larger women may not make it on the red carpet,
But by god, we're still on the market.
My husband says he loves big women more,
Because there is always more of us to explore.
Those stick thin women may be more popular and grand,
But years ago it was us with the upper hand.
The Mona Lisa was four hundred pounds,
With her beauty too close to the grounds.
So you see if you get depressed,
On those days nothing fits when you go to get dressed.
Just remember one thing, my dear.
There are a million men waiting to whisper in your ear.
So what if you think you're round in all the wrong places,
Trust me there are men that will still turn their faces.
Author notes
lilblueeyesmine1978
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Comments
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this is really good. look forward to having you in the fam.
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That is a great poem. Yes, everyone should just be themselves and not worry about their weight.
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Don't forget to post what part of my family you want to be...You can post what you want to be in my AP Family in the Author's Notes.
I LOVED what you said in this poem. See I have self-esteem issues myself, so I thought that you made such an excellent point. You did an amazing job with this -
I really like the strength of this poem, and actually, there should be more of these on the net.
You radiate a powerful message to the world and I like that!
Thank you for entering this contest, I wish you the best of luck!
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Aww, this is so refreshing and such a spirit lifter. I'm sure there are millions of us who feel the same way!
Beautiful, to the point write with loads of meaning packed into it.
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I really enjoyed it!
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Nice...don't care much for skinny women either .
Great poem.
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very nice, but there are heavy set models too, I like the point that you're trying to get across and the title goes very well with it....speaks a certain truth though it can seem a little offfensive to those girls who want to be models or are models just because that is them and they love the fashion business and the lifestyle....
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I commented before...
But I need to tell you, I used to weigh a lot. Then I
got allergies, can't eat much of anything...I would give the world to be able to be big again...so
DO be careful what you wish for everyone...there are
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LOL! Touche!!!!! I have to agree - the models are damn ugly!!! and, yes, there are MANY, MANY men out there who enjoy having a woman with some meat on her - hell, if there wasn't I'd be in a lot of trouble!
thank you for your entry
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This is great!
Excellent write!
*PEACE*
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cool write
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i really enjoyed reading this as i am quite sick of all the comments people get especially girls about their weight. i am a 15 year old girl in high school and although i am rather big i have friends. But it kills me to see a number of the larger kids (including me on a bad day
) trying to fight back the anger, upset and the tears because the others are putting everyone down because they are not as slim not as pretty or as popular as them. This write really does inspire me and i'm sure many others to not care how heavy we are or what others think about us but to just be ourselves and people will like that however we look. Thanks 
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wow this poem boosted my self esteem. I thought evry1 in the world thought being more than size 3 was disgusting. but im a size 14-16 in juniors and its good 2 hear sum1 out there isnt gonna shun me 4 it
thanx alot
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thank you for your comment on my poem 'Just Be You' I am so sick and tired of all the poor teenage girls feeling like they have to be anhorexic to be popular. I have been fat since about age eleven and guess what? I was always surrounded by friends. I used to think that you had to be pretty and/or rich to be popular and then I went to high school and found out that real friends could not care less how you look. It is what is on the inside that counts. I may still be big (nearly 300 pounds) but I am happy and I have three beautiful children. I also have a good job with a lot of respect where I most of the time work to hard. But I love my life. Crazy kids, sixteen hour days at work on my feet all day, even my overly jealous husband. At least I know in my heart that if he is that jealous then there really must be something about me that he is worried someone else wants. Thanks again for the comment.
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Beautiful
I was just browsing and the title caught my eye. Just Be You.
You did a wonderful job on this. Let me make this observation.
I truly believe times have changed. I remember when I was a teenager Fat girls Or should I say Plump Girls in the boys eyes was a no no and only the slim trim girls were invited to the Proms and Parties.
I am surrounded by teenagers where I live and I notice most of the so called Plump girls are walking around with some of the best looking Boys in town and School. oh the slim trim girls are still there and are doing ok but I have noticed that the jealousy has now on the other side. ( oh by the way I am a guy) My wife is no longer with me I am 5ft6 weigh 159 lb. My wife averaged from 180 to 200lb. and I loved with all my heart All 200lbs. of her.
Its not what is on the outside its that lovely person inside that makes the beauty outside.
You did a wonderful job on this I applaud Applaud this
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its just amazing ,i love your words that u used.its really a very true poem .keep it up!
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aww nice poem
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thanks to all for your kind words.
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Believe me there are not many men who appreciate stick insects.I f a person is naturally that way then great but if a WOMAN!!!!! is naturally curvy then that is how it should be.We females have a right to be natural.Not airbrushed out of sight.Well done for sharing your thoughts, Ros
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This is a great poem!
It's always best to just be yourself.
It really doesn't matter what the world thinks about you.
It's who you are deep down inside that people should look to see. Thank you for sharing this! Good luck to you in the contest with it!
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Wonderful and Funny
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Fine tuned
Naughty , yet the same time thought provoking message in your Poem dear Lilblueeyesmine 1978 !
A Tribute to people like me ! We are so happy to see as a solation to our looks. As when passing through crowd they point out us we biggies ( stout persons like me )feel comfortable in your words.
Yes God has given us the appearence to look fat, yet our hearts are tender !
Gr8t to enjoy !
cya
subbu -
A BEAUTIFUL WRITE!!!
A poem that says it all on the essence of appreciating yourself for who you are and do not allow what you see or hear about other people who you believe are better than you depress you.In a nut shell according to the subject matter :"Just be you." -
Nice
I like the whole point of this poem. I am a guy and I agree, but I must say that where you say all the wrong places, I say all the right places.
Nice write.
Dimitri -
Very nice in fact awesome. What a person looks like on the outside means very little. The woman I love is a big woman. She's the most beautiful person inside I've ever known. So be big beautiful and proud. Keep up the good work. Great job.
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thanks everyone for your wonderful comments.
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excelent!!!!!!
i love this poem... it has convition, and hope love stuff to... ireally like this its great to read a poem with so much truth, i can relate to this poem in being a bigger girl.... it sure made me feel better lol...
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Bravo! I just had to read this again, and comment again. Thank you for writing this poem and letting the world know that women refuse to be judged by their appearance. Our appearance is not what defines us. Our actions and personal attributes are! Well done and keep up the great work. Peace be with you.
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Whew! An extremely bold and beautiful write. I like it for the directness of tone, and for the naive flow of words you have used! I admire the way you have defined your personal views on beauty in this piece! It's refreshing!!
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Awesome!!
You have hit the nail on the head with this poem. Its really all about being non-judgemental and you are so right, it is not about what you look like on the outside, but rather the beauty that radiates from within. Beautifully penned with great humour, fun and charature. -
hello! I love this poem. Its very true and spirit lifting to read. You wrote it nicely and i like the rhythm of it. Thin people and models are so disgustingly overrated it really does make me sick. anyway, lovely, dear!
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fantastic
yay!!! for the larger women in the world! so many people these days worry about not being thin, and its annoying, because everybody is perfect as they are. a great poem with lots of flowyingness! a fantastic read/write!!
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Loved it.
I really loved the content of the poem, it's so true, but I think that sometimes it just takes things like this to throw it in people's faces! It's completely crazy. I think that the acctually writing of the poem was just okay, but the message spoke louder.
Loved it.
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Being round in all the wrong places.
this is a perspective i've not heard before, and i find it much more refreshing than just repeatedly saying the same thing. Quite an interesting read. You have much talent. The rhyming was a bit forced in places, but the message was so nice, and your array of word choice so profound, it was still wonderful. =] Great write and thanks for sharing.
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very good
wow very good.i feel better about my self now.^ ^
well i should thank u we needed poems that give slightly heavy and up a better view of them selfs.thank u alot
~lovelikeblood
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Very well done
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up with bbw's :D
Up with big beautiful women! Down with Twiggies..
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Bravo!
BRAVO!! What a great write and you have spoken such an amazing truth!! This piece is great!! Thanks for sharing!!
Shannon -
thanks to all for your wonderful comments.
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VERY BEAUTIFUL
This was very true and heartfelt. I agree with the comment tbarte wrote. Everyone has their beauty. And someone will see theirbeauty shine within. Wonderful poem. Becca
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Encouraging
A Beautiful trubute to people that are often put down, or stereotyped, a great write, and an enjoyable read, thanks for sharing and keep up the good work -
that is cute and very encouraging.ok viva la pasta! viva all the sweets, and viva all the goodies!
i love the words they are so soothing. yes i like it a bit larger not stick like as i know i love good food. but wearing all one can is so goooood too.
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The truth abounds in this poem. The message is that everyone is beautiful. The most beautiful people are the ones who don't let society define beauty! Well done. Peace be with you.
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Well, I was recently called "sir" by a viewer who commented on some of my work...my first instinct was to correct the comment and allow them the priviledge of knowing I was indeed a "maam"..however, my next instict was that it wasnt the gender that wrote this that got a comment, it was the person who wrote it. Why am I telling you this....because...You have beautifully displayed for all to see that we are all unique in one form or another and we are all deserving of love and praise.
I intrepreted this differently the second time I read it then I did the first. I wont tell you what I got from it each time because I dont wish to taint the vision of others views. What I will tell you is this....both times this was a poignant read, well executed and beautifully stated. There is no doubt in my mind that you have done a great justice in writing this poem, you have bridged a gap that is long overdue for repair. I am not a large woman but I do come from a long line of them and I can tell you that each and everyone of them is much loved and appreciated by thier men....love doesnt come in sizes ! Thank you for this great piece of work! -
awesome job!!! ur so right about everythin u wrote...i hope more ppl look at this poem. Just would like to mention that there is a wonderful plus-size model who has overcome many obstacles i had the privilege to meet named "Emme" (you can google her). She has been doing a wonderful job with trying to promote the beauty of bigger women which i thought was a fantastic thing to do. Maybe in the future magazines n tv wont be as narrow-minded as today.
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that was sweet, I really liked that piece, I am glad you gave the reader the thouhgt no matter wht they look like there are men who really love the fullness of a women
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Wow this is an amazing write. It make me feel so good. Yeah I'm one of those girls who goes from a Medium to a 1x depending on were I shop. So this is a write that made me fell so much better.
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This is cool. I do like women with more substance, that is physically and mentally. Most of the real skinny ones are starving in more than caloric intake. Great write, Rubens painted chubby chicks as well. -
This was very well done thanks for sharing
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Great
This is such a great write! This is now the theme poem for my life! I'm so glad that you wrote this! It makes me feel more comfortable in my skin. This write is more than worthy of everyone's applause. Thanks so much for sharing this great write! Wonderful job!
Safely hidden in the darkness,
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What a wonderful tribute to the pleasant women of the world ... you are right - we still turn heads - in a positive way ... thanks for your support!
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outstanding
WOW.... i dont even know what to say. your exactly right. even models who every 15 year old girl looks up to arent as skinny as they appear to be. its cameras, and the way they're angled. so no one can be that skinny and yet every one still fights to be. so no matter what we weight we are never truly happy with ourselves. i look up to you, it makes me want to get more self esteem on myself. great poem i thought you did amazing. -
very creative, unique write you have here. I relate to this poem and am happy that you spoke out. Great rythmn and flow. I loved it. Thanks for sahring best of luck to you.
Vsutton -
Good job! Very well said. I still had baby fat in my teens, and people can be cruel. It is the inside that counts anyway. REAL men love their women just the way they are. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest. Jeannie D Hunter
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amazing
I love this poem!! I myself am a bit bigger in most places but I am not willing to change for anyone for myself. There are guys out there I know with big hearts who love bigger women.. And I hope to find one of those that love me for me. Those thin women can't compare to us bigger women.. Most of them got there from bulemia and anorexia just isn't that smartest idea. A great poem and very moving keep up the good work!! -
Much appluase!!! Encore!!!!!! This was magnificent!! Wow, some of try to live by "It's what is on the inside that counts." Well it's women like you who are that confidence in how they look even if it may not be the best in today's standards, and at the same time have enough self respect for themselves to say, no, I don't have to live up to the world standards, that make that saying count. Awesome poem. Keep it up, and the best of luck in the contest!!
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awsome!
great great piece of work! very nice job diff. idea to write about. i like the last line that tied it all up "Trust me there are men that will still turn their faces" great way to end it
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Sweet and Honest!
Such a sweet write. It's good to see you own and accept who you are. And it sounds like you love yourself, which is such a huge bonus!
I cannot comment too much as I'm at neither end of the scale (for today, anyway!) but I love the way you've embraced yourself and told the world. By the amount of encouragement you've been receiving, I'd say there's a lot of folk who think the same as me.
Best Wishes, always. -Emmjay
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Nice message. (: You know what’s bad, is when those little sticks start complaining about being ‘fat.’ I can’t help but be completely floored. I mean, they can make a normal sized girl feel like a cow! Oh how I love our media and society! Ugh. It really doesn’t matter what size you are, what you look like, or anything like that because you will always think that you could be better. It’s sad, but true; I cant say I know of anyone who is 100% happy with the way their life is. I like that you were able to rhyme without sounding forced. Good stuff.
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very good
what an inspiring write.. I think that I'm somewhere in the middle of thick and thin..but it's always a constant battle.
somedays I would just love to not worry about it and just be me
anyway very nice write
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Isn't that the truth well done.
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Too good for the world
OMG. I am speechless, It is so good. Your ryhming makes alot sense. This will connect to every one, Thin or thick, Short or tall. This is one of the best and inspiring poem ever. As a 10 year old girl, The message out there is BE SKINNY!!! This poem is showing be yourself and dont hate your self no matter how u look. I am one of the thin kids(thought I eat like a hippo), But i would never make fun of a kid who was bigger than me. This is an issue and i wish the whole world who see this. The ones who eat and the ones who dont eat. (LOL) *smile*
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Very nice write that you had penned here your rhythm and rhyme flowed beautifully throughout the entire poem good luck in the contest
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Bravo! Bravo! This piece really made me feel good! Thank You!!
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kickasstic awesome
hey I Loved your poem! Sadly, I make the *stick* genre (but I love big clothes), but it's one of those things that I was ranting about a long time ago...I had friends who were made fun of because of clothes and such--by "model popular sticks"...this poem is just the greatest way of flipping them off. ^_^ -
Remember when Twiggy was talked about always in the 60's - for being so thin and waif like - looked sick- as so many of the top stars do when they lose so much weight. As long as one is healthy, does not matter the weight. Great sentiments expressed in these lines - easy to read and understand.
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Exactly! Stick people just get burned more easily.... lol Nice job!
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"All tiny and thin, they look like a stick." sounds a bit cliche. The comparason of a person and a stick is a bit over done. When you say the sentence"My husband says he loves big women more,"it makes you tink that you yourself are fat.I guess it adds to it."So you see if you get depressed,
On those days nothing fits when you go to get dressed.
Just remember one thing, my dear.
There are a million men waiting to whisper in your ear." is a good line because it seems very happy. Plus, it rhymes. I like the subject of the poem. Over all I guess it was .... eh, alright. Thanks for the extra four points. I just started a contest an hour ago and am trying to make points. -
thanks everyone for you kind comments and applause.
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this is so0o0o0o0o0o amazingly great i loved it i know what you are saying i believe everybody should be treated equally despite how much they weigh etcetera great work i totally agree 100%
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this is such a true and inspiring poem. i agree with you totally, girls my age are getting pathetically crazy about their weight. Hilary Duff used to be my idol, i loved her in lizzy mcguire and the first cheaper by the dozen and raise your voice and all those movies, but now hollywood has gotten to her or something and she's is grossly thin. most hollywood girls are these days. it's ridiculous. look at mary kate olsen, and lindsay lohan, they were beautiful until their agents or whatever told them to loose weight. kelly clarkson's people told her she needed to loose weight, and she didn't, she's actually gained weight since she won american idol, and i love her. the skinny models in magazine like seventeen and cozmogirl just disapoint me, they used to make me feel self-contious about myself, now i just feel sad fror them, i'll be honest, i am a little over weight, but when it comes to the girl that looks like you'll break her, or me, i'll probably be getting the guy. it's nasty and sick when you can see a girls ribs in her chest. it's sad, very very sad. so i like your poem, it speaks to me. and i hope that girls out there not eating and/or throwing up their meals will read this, and realize we area all perfect in our own way, there is no set image that you have to live up to. god made you a certain way, and you shouldn't try and change that. thank you for sharing this poem
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Awesome, Awesome, Awesome. I absolutely love this write. It's about time we big women stood up and took some credit for being the amazing, non liposuctioned women that we are. This was incredible and i'm so happy that you posted it. Two thumbs up, bravo, and an applaud. Blessed Be and Merry Part.
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OMG, awesome poem, love it so much! And yes, I agree with you too! I hate those sticks who aint got any meat. What ever. This was an awesome poem and I enjoyed reading it so much! Keep writing from within!
See you around the deep end
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This is sooo true! I mean it's not like my girl' is rounded...anywhere, but if she was...I wouldn't mind all that much...except she's a little different to look at, but I get the point to this...a lot of guys don't see the beauty to the women that isn't a model of a sort, but then again my girl' wasnt exactly creme of the crop, but she was creme of my crop...beautiful to me, and not really to the rest of the world...for some strange reason! okay okay enough about my personal life...your poem! the rhymes were pretty good, and the flow went rather well.
"The models these days make me sick,
All tiny and thin, they look like a stick."
that is so true...I mean...you don't have to be a stick to be attractive...I mean...personally I'd rather you werent a stick!
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Beautiful
I so totally agree with you. There is nothing wrong with alittle bit of meat being on a girl's bones. I am proud of my body, and while I could stand to loose a few, I am not going to be one of those chicks who weigh like 5 stone. This is beautifully done. And my boyfriend, who is currently reading over my shoulder, agrees with this too. lol. ^_^
Great work and good luck in the contest!
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I know what you mean! Around here, you wouldn't believe how many women think the skiny look is the best, but I know several guys that like their women with some meat on their bones. Great job expressing this one!
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This is a magnificent piece. I love how the comparrison is evenly matched back and forth and always becomes positive. You have really done a nice piece here thanks for sharing and great luck in the contest....Michael -
Ilove this honest to goodness from the heart write, I am not overly heavy but where I need to be seen as attractive to me,
I admire your write so much, Keep expressing your feelings I love it, MM
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Very well written, nice flow and rythme. Great story line and so well said. Truth be told it wasn't until the 60's that women for some reason started sliming down and than Twiggy and a few others started setting the stage for skin and bones. Truth be know, none of them are healthy and they're eating habits are horrify.
Most men really do like women with a little meet on the bones, hard to hug or snuggle up to a bag of bones.lol
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So what indeed! Not all men appreciate those extra small bodies some women sculpt (I'm one of them) so your poem rings true. A very well done to you dear!
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Nice and true. Great written verses and perfect message from the very first line. I am not fat and do not need to struggle with food but (please do not hate me, somehow I know to stop at the right time) I understand your words. You know how to accept and to say what's on your way
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My husband says he loves big women more,
Because there is always more of us to explore
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Following verses are simply the best heart of this poem:
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Those stick thin women may be more popular and grand,
But years ago it was us with the upper hand.
The Mona Lisa was four hundred pounds,
With her beauty too close to the grounds.
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Nice done. wish you a lot of luck.
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contest no contest you sure have won my vote- a most hillarious , extremely well written poem - you have rhymed so well- your subject matter is indeed a fantastic message -so many young and old go around penalising themselves for not making it as the so called order of the day- beauty is rather in whats inside -this is something the obseesed fail to see -a wonderful write - I have enjoyed it a whole bunch
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Loved it! Both humorous and bringing a great message. Fantastic piece
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Thank you. i am fat. SO WHAT. i am pretty in my own way. plus....bigger girls have REAl boobs......and there most the time bigger!!!! saves us money. i love this poem because it tells the truth. we are still pretty. so thank you. you made me feel a little better about myself tonight
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i love this ..i just love this..i am full figured and i tell i am proud of myself ..God bless you...we are all beautiful thanks for bringing that truth forward ..i applaud you my dear..well done!!!!
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Yes the Mons Lisa really was 400 lbs or so. They have actually estimated that she may have been heavier than that. Back in those days being fat was a good thing because in those days supposedly only very rich people were able to afford enought food to make a person fat.
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Wow! You go tell it on the mountain top girlfriend! This is a great little piece that you have written here! I like it! I know that the world can seem really harsh when you aren't looking perfectly in all the right ways. And I love how you pointed out that times change and opinions change all the time and so it doesn't mean a whole lot at the end. But are you serious? Mona Lisa was 400 lbs.??? I didn't know that! Wow. That girl looked damn good, didn't she? That's just unreal! I think that you did a good job of expressing yourself here. So good luck in the contest you entered and thanks for featuring this so that we all had a chance to share your words and feelings with you.
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OH SO BEAUTIFUL AND STRONG! I BOW TO YOU with understanding and gratefullness for writing such a piece! I totally agree with your words here and they really sound like they are straight from the heart and somewhat right after or soon after an event happened to strike up this big piece of truth and reality! Thank you for writing a great read; Iapplaud.
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Ha, nice. This is a good message. Was the Mona Lisa really four hundred pounds?? Now I am interested...haha. This was a good poem, well done.
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You rhyme beautifully! I really like how you made this statement, and how you said it in a way that was amusing. It's short and sweet and wonderful. A great write.
I think that for all of us girls, this poem makes us feel beautiful. Just reading it makes me feel better about myself. I am so bookmarking this for next time I feel bad about myself.
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I so agree! You shouldn't get all worked up about being over weight! Theres nothing wrong with it, its the personality that counts. great job!
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HAHAHA so true. I like my women soft. nice write i loved the flow good job ~Ron~
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Kenzie! I never realized you used to be anorexic! Wow. I didn't know that. Okay, I guess you're gone now, I just noticed that comment. Wow. Anyways, okay! Tootles!
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this is so great!! many of us, especially teens like me, need inspiration like this poem--there are so many of us who are very insecure about themselves, but this poem tells you to love who you are--i love it for that....great work....g'day and peace....:]
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i can relate so much to this and i really am glad that you have the courage to post a poem like that... i used to be anorexic due to the encouragement of people around me but things like this poem encourage me to be beautiful just the way i am
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PROFOUND!
I like to offer my support as a man who deffinately appreciates a women not a skeleton. The media today is ruining the lives of those have not yet killed. Wonderfully written!
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