Welcome to my world...
where there is nothing to fear.
It is a world where
pain does not exist.
...A world that can only be imagined
in the mind of a child.
...A world where one can live
in peace and happiness.
What a wonderful place
this really is.
I only hope that someday
you, too can see it.
It is the perfect world...
that only exists ...
In my Dreams.
~~A Mirror Between Two Worlds~~
Welcome to this world...
everything..is to fear.
Its a world where pain
is around every corner.
...A world that can only be escaped
in the mind of a child.
...A world where
peace and happiness
are hard to find.
What a horrible place
this can truly be.
It is a world that no one
really wishes to see.
It is the real world...
that I can only escape ...
In My Dreams.
Author notes
Oh...I hope you like it...as it was difficult to not be my normal Rhyming self...I think I slipped somewhere in there....but...nonetheless..I met your requirements to the best of a High School Senior's Abilities. 
Written August 6th, 2006
A contest entry
- Anything At All by Heavenly Angel.
26000 points, ended June 9, 2007, 100 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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woo good
to bad life isnt like that
life sucks -
Very effective!
I love the way you wrote this, I am speechless hun!
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>> WOW << i rele like this... it how some twisted sense to it and rele creative
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>.> this so reminds me of an episode of charmed...Okay,so like,I loved the contrast between the two 'world's and how they connected to eachother somehow.(how the child's mind is involved)Keep it up mi amigo.
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I read it once, read it again, and then I read it out loud, each time I found deeper meaning and truth in the beauty of your words. The contrast between what is and what you would like life to be is beautifully expressed in the purity and starkness of the dream and reality of the world as it is. This is a wonderful poem Good luck in the contest a definite winner. God Bless Son, Jo-Ann
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Wow!
Hey!! I loved this, it's so sad yet so true! The two contrasting verses were so effective, I've never seen that done before! Thank you! abi x x x -
Fairy tales are so great,aren't they?
Though they fall in love in less than a day and whatnot,
but at least they give us something? some hope.
Yet I prefer reality. And this poem reminded me of that. Again, I can relate to this. Great.
...Simply Me♥ -
how true is this poem
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So kiss and kill these dreams were never meant to be anyway..
Let's run away to our fairy tale make believes? I'm the fairy to your tale though. Anyway, I'll off with the riddles so that you won't understand.
Is it really a mirror? I don't quite see, this mirror distortion of me... Sorrow running amuck of the place, or perhaps it's happiness's gentle guidance that draws the smile on her face.
It's a swell thing to write, a little harsh once the realization comes to be, that these are the worlds that we sleep within. -
This is really very good. I loved the comparison of the two worlds.Very appropriate title. Excellent. Good luck in the contest.
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Very creative this is...
I liked it
Thank you for sharing and for being a part of the contest -
a lovely lovely write
I was really making a journey through your poetry. truly its all dreams.. in all possible ways its only dreams. Both the painless and painful worlds are dreams. If you delve deeper, in all senses, pain or no-pain state does not exist.. its all dream... but we suffer or enjoy to the extent we want to indulge ourself or associate ourself with those dreams..
Very true philosophically.
I liked this in all possible ways..
May God bless you!!!
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I went meandering through your poem list and ended up on this one... I'm glad I did.
First of all, I like free verse, it's probably my favorite way to write, though I have lots of others which are not free verse.
Your message in this piece is strong yet gentle, and real food for thought. I like the reversal of mindset between the two parts of the poem. I think we all have our dream world, where everything is as we would like it, I also think it balances the real world, makes it bearable at times. Fortunatly the two are a happy mix, dreams and reality, hope and dispair.
A very good write, Timeless Wisdom, one which I enjoyed reading You seem to have great potential as a poet ...you are quite good
Dee
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I'd just lioke tosay how much I love these contrasting lines
...A world that can only be imagined
in the mind of a child.
AND
...A world that can only be escaped
in the mind of a child.
I just absolutely love this because it's so..deep. I don't even know how to explain. Well anyways, great poem!!
*hughug*
MissCassie -
was this already entered into a contest? if i was i fear i may not be able to allow it as i do not think it fair on all of the other non trophy people who have written a new poem, sorry
by the way though, while i am here, this is a fantastic write brilliant work.
laurax -
Thank you sooooo much...Your words inspire my muse...
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WoW
This was an interesting piece,good flow and form, a very good read from start to finish. Thanks for sharing. -
powerful
Splendid outlook on both sides - you handle the dichotomy with grace and poetic style. I have found there are two ways to everything, depending on your mood, your state of mind. You illustrated this wonderfully. I am so glad to have read your work.
Hugs WolfHeart -
You're a senior? Well congrats then! I hope this year is a good one for you. I know high school has seemed to kinda slip right by me. I'm a junior but it feels like I just started high school yesterday. Anyways...
Freeverse is a very beatiful form of poetry and I adore writing it and reading it. I think a lot of times ryhming poetry limits what the writer can say because of syllable counts and of course, certain words that ryhme. However, it is also very fun to read any people who are good at writing it have a true talent.
I do want to point out a few things though. The first on is that your stanzas look more like two paragraphs, which they don't need to be. Poetry is at its best when written with short phrases rather than long snetences. Us poets throw out a lot of the writing rules you'll find in most grammar classes and replace them with our own. We're just smart like that.
I'm going to list the stanza as you have written it (just so you don't have to click on your poem to read it once you get this comment) and then re-write it in a way that I think will make it more reader-friendly.
"Welcome to my world...where there is nothing to fear.
It is a world where pain does not exist.
...A world that can only be imagined in the mind of a child.
...A world where one can live in peace and happiness.
What a wonderful place this really is.
I only hope that someday you, too can see it.
It is the perfect world... that only exists ...
In my Dreams."
This is very wordy and a little over the top for poetry. Try something like:
Welcome to my world...
there is nothing to fear.
A world where pain does not exist,
one that can only be imagined
in the mind of a child.
A world where one can live in peace and happiness.
What a wonderful place this is.
I only hope that someday you
too, can see it.
It is the perfect world... only existing...
In my Dreams.
If you go about the second stanza with the same mind frame, I think you'll see what I mean about certain words and where to space them. All in all though this is a very well written piece. It just needs some fine tuning as we all do every now and then.
Good luck in school.
-Faithful Dreamer
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