Smoking my friends down to the filter,
drinking my problems and solutions away.
Depression taking over my body in shadows,
praying to get through another day.
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I try not to make too many dark poems, as there are too many and they're continuously boring and the same. So I made mine short and sweet.
Written August 6th, 2006
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i think you have nailed it with this short piece, many can relate to the sitting with a fag(cigarette)in one hand and a glass of wine in the other wishing it would all go away. there is no need to get flowery with words as this proves saying it as it is works just as well. great write
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its really short but the point comes across none-the-less written wonderfully !!
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This is short and to the point.You've created a really lovely piece.This piece is full or emotion and so powerful.I really enjoyed reading this.Thanx for sharing.Keep up the amazing work.If ya ever need anyone to lean on or just to talk to im here.
God Bless
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short, but I really like this. It's very meaningful, insightful, and deep. You did a great job. thanks for sharing with us
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well worded
This may be short but it's full of sadness. It shows a depth of pain felt by many. Well written. I like the analagy of depression being like shadows that take over, because like shadows depression can be felt at varying darknesses.
The first poem in a long while that I've read that seems to have truth for the author behind it. -
I liked this one probably the best of any I have read. Short & sweet fit it well. I think you did an incredible job! *Sonya*
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Depression taking over my body in shadows,
praying to get through another day.
I do agree that this is short and sweet as well..
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you call it sweet?
lol, I hope you don't feel this way!
I like it! It is strong!
Keep writing
~Omichi
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