I show you only my cover,
So, Careful
Not to let you read my pages.
If I let you read,
you would know what,
I cannot bear to tell.
I feel so alone,
I want to let you in,
But if I do, will you run?
In these pages,
I have so many enemies,
ones you would never expect.
In these pages,
I have so much...
I am ashamed of, I can't let you read.
I was never an open book,
I will always be the cover.
Don't ask me to let you read.
I am not ready,
And I don't know...
If I will ever be anything but a cover.
Author notes
Just wrote this on a whim... Going through so much lately, was hoping to tell a little out. Hope you like, tell me what you think
Written April 8th, 2003
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Thank you to all who have commented on this poem.... I logged in today and for the first time I was overwhelmed by the amount of comments I found on my poems. I was beginning to think that no one liked my poetry. I have fixed my clerical errors. Again thank you all so very much. I will be sure to read some of your work as will, just give me some time. There are alot of you I need to respond to....
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I've felt like this so many times. Great to see something I can relate to. Does this mean it's okay to judge by the cover if the book won't open? Just curious.
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Wow. I can really relate to this piece and the words that you use in it. "I feel so alone. I want to let you in. But if I do, will you run?" That line rings true in my head over and over. It is difficult to let someone in to the real you, the one that has issues and secrets and fears and scars. And it is a difficult thing to open up to someone in this way and then have them run off because of it. It is a difficult thing to know when someone will or will not do this. To me, if you feel comfortable with the person, if you feel like you are really yourself around them and not just putting on a show around them, then the door is unlocked for you to open. This is such a great piece. It is well put together and it flows very nice. Keep writing!
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this is diffrent but i like it alot, this is very well written, keep it up i like your work..
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loved it!
your poem reminds me of myself when i used to have a crush on someone but didn't dare to tell him, because i was too shy or afraid that i might get hurt... sometimes i still feel this way even towards people that i love and that are a part in my life. your poem is very well written, i really like how you set it up! and hopefully things will be going better for you soon! -
I know what it is like to want to open up to someone, but can't bring yourself to do it because of fear, or unwanted expectations.. This poem is truly amazing. It says a lot, not only about the situation itself, but also on your talent. I love this poem!!
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Oh, I liked this a lot. It expressed tons of emotion. I hoped it let you let that stuff all out. Um, in the first staza, "carefull" should be "careful" and in the second "bare" should be "bear". Other than that, it's great! Super job!
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Baring your heart and your soul is always hard, especially when you fear rejection. The metaphor of being a book judged by its cover is a different interpretation and certainly turning an old cliche on its head. You want to be read, but you don't want to be misunderstood and you definitely don't want anyone to run at what they read. So many feel that way. I do like the nontraditional approach and metaphor. In the first stanza though, carefull is spelled CAREFUL and in the second stanza "...cannot bare to tell..." should be cannot BEAR to tell.
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good
I really enjoyed the content of your poem. It had real emotion that the majority of readers can identify with, the masks we hide behind to survive.
A suggestion on punctuation, write your lines out in one long line and then punctuate. For example:
If I let you read, you would know what, I cannot bare to tell.
You can see by this that the second comma is not needed. Your poem then becomes:
If I let you read,
you would know what
I cannot bare to tell.
Hope that helps.
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Staci~
Sorry about that... I didn't mean to click on it, but I decided since I did I better leave a comment otherwise I would get in trouble. lol Keep writing.
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Staci~
Hey! I thought that this was a really good poem. It was nicely written, and it had a good flow to it. Keep writing, and thank you for sharing.
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excellent self-examination
Wonderful poem! Terrific! Poem flows well, nice style, content is excellent and presentation is very nice. Poem reveals a lot without actually providing to much information. (as to type of person u probably are)? I see in this poem so many characteristics of myself. I reveal but only to a certain point. I've been that way all my life. Now almost 50 a grandma doubt I'll change? Sat here thinking about all the sercets held within me. Very visual trip! Most of that will say right where it is. Very talented writer. I don't remember reading your work be-4? So many writers and so little time. I do try to move about looking for new people to read. Even though we all have our favorites. God Bless and thanks for sharing with me.
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wow. what a great write. I can actually kind of relate to this. A little differently though. Sometimes you feel like you can only Show someone your outside...all good and happy and friendly...but you have a secret that you could bear to share...and its part of your inside.
For me, you put this feeling into words.
Thanks so much for sharing, I loved it.
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Well, hopefully, you will learn that these secrets you guard are not as uncommon as you think, as you read the confessions of other poets...
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sounds...yearning
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Intriguing..Makes you want to know more..And yet you learn that there is more than just the cover!
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