Option 2
I woke to a really bad storm. Around 7 or 7:30 AM when I should have been getting ready to leave for my cashier's job 11 miles away in Winnfield, LA, a tornado decided to pay our little town an unwelcome visit. I took my pillow and Bible and headed for the bathtub in our mobile home. I did a whole lotta praying that this storm would pass quickly and not turn the mobile home over. My prayers were answered. After 15 minutes of sheer terror, the storm passed with just the front porch half torn off. I learned later that it tore the roof off of our post office. It also blew the big old oak tree up and threw it across the driveway so that I could not get out of the driveway until one of my logger neighbors moved the downed tree out of the way. I recall I was only an hour late for work that day. 11 miles away in Winnfield they weren't hit as hard as Atlanta.
As scary as it was, I am thankful that the mobile home didn't turn over and that there was not more damage than there was.
Author notes
Option 2
Written August 5th, 2006
A contest entry
- My first contest by EggnBaconfrier.
300 points, ended August 11, 2006, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Liked your story, but thought it looked more like prose that poery - maybe because it was in paragraph form. By changing it around into verses it might appear m ore like a poem. If it is prose then the word story or prose culd be put in brackets after the title. Had a tornado hit near here in the 80's causing many deaths and destruction of a trailer park.
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very nice write!!!...so glad you survived!!!..you really did have God on your side..im not much of a God or Bible person but i think i will check out your Psalm (( i do got 2 Bibles ))..the more i hear of God helpin people and the trust they put in him i think i shud give him a try ...he may even turn out to be my friend...good luck in contest!!! smiles ~cheeky~
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You've not written much lately?
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wow. thats a pretty amazing story. i have always been fascinated by tornadoes, we don't get them here in aussieland, which could quite possibly be a good thing. i like that you put your trust in God. not many people do these days. i myself am christian, but i wish i had stronger faith.
nice work, well done
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Scary yet Nice!
Thank God you were not harmed and you're mobile home was not destroyed like it could have been easily. it isd a Miracle from the hands of God and his army of Angels protected you from this nasty tornado. I felt like I was there with you through out the storm ansd glad you were not too late to your job. a Beautiful yet scary poem this was but excellent write all round.
Sincerely, Paul 
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Mobile homes seem to be a tornado's favourite place to turn upside down. Every time i see the damage a tornado had caused it's almost always mobile homes or trailer parks.
If it were me i would be digging one of those root cellars - it may just save your life one day. Bravo on this, very well written,
galfalfa -
thank you for your comment on my poem 'Just Be You' I am so sick and tired of all the poor teenage girls feeling like they have to be anhorexic to be popular. I have been fat since about age eleven and guess what? I was always surrounded by friends. I used to think that you had to be pretty and/or rich to be popular and then I went to high school and found out that real friends could not care less how you look. It is what is on the inside that counts. I may still be big (nearly 300 pounds) but I am happy and I have three beautiful children. I also have a good job with a lot of respect where I most of the time work to hard. But I love my life. Crazy kids, sixteen hour days at work on my feet all day, even my overly jealous husband. At least I know in my heart that if he is that jealous then there really must be something about me that he is worried someone else wants. Thanks again for the comment. Thanks for sharing your great poetry and stories too. I love this story. I have lived through a tornado too but I was very young.
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The one place I wouldn't like to be in when a tornado is over head, is in a mobile home. I am sure that you were thanking God for His grace and protection when it was all over with.
You have a gift of retelling events with such clarity and definition.~vj
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WooHoo a tornado will do that to you. Been in a few in Ks. You really wrote well about this one. Nice write good job.
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This poem took my breath away!!!! I actually felt scared and got all tight!!! Great job on this write!!!! Good luck in the contest!!!!!
~HaLeY~
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great poem...good luck in the contest...your visuals were great, I felt like I was there sitting next to you in the storm...great job, once again...good luck!!!!!!!!!!!
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I don't quite remember that. what year
was that during? maybe I wasn't alive
yet or something, iono. great write!
you described everything so well. I
could see everything that you saw.
good luck! byes
<3 Triste
wait..was this in Louisiana or Georgia?
bit confused about that.
Edited on Aug 05, 8:40 p.m. because '....just because'.
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