" I am off with you"
Its so easy for you...
We were the soul mates
The man and wife, yes spiritually
No wedding rings, but we shared life breaths
The dreams that you made me see
while my vision was blurred with tears
you gave me breath when i was about to die
of the brutal slashes that life gave me
we were perfect, perfect for each other
but then you knew i wasn't ideal
I am not ideal... can never be
no one is ideal, its not my hemartia
your fanaticism for ideal is taking toll on our life
you leave me like that
you spiritual wife
your perfect woman
for i am not ideal...
and you knew that god wasn't ideal too...
all i got was a " I am off with you"
Its so easy for you
and ever since i read this
i am hearing myself say
mmm, what you say?
Mm, that you only meant well? Well, of course you did.
mmm, what you say?
mm, that its all for the best? Ah of course it is.
mmm, what you say?
mm, that its just what we needed? And you decided it.
mmm, what you say...
Author notes
i chose option one
Written August 5th, 2006
A contest entry
- Choose Your Poison by Restless and True.
400 points, ended August 14, 2006, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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gosh ! m so upset rt know tht i didnt notice m applauding my own page...
i will chk out sm of ur poetic stuff
regards -
thnx
i will sit sm time n make the changes in all poems
sorry "and"
thnx sweets, i will increase ur treasure by applauding ur comment, use it in promoting ur poem -
well i was speaking on you using 'u' yo say you etc, why not just write the word 'you'? it is only two extra letters, surely it isn't going to tire you
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m sorry to say, but m a disappointment to the poet in me, i stopped writing long ago n have deattached myself for so long tht i didnt even know which poem u had commented on, read it once.... n i cant do anything abt wht i wrote....
m not being rude, but i just cant see my poems anymore... sm emotional mess
but dear, thnx for taking out time n commenting... all i can say is tht u picked up the worst of the lot to know my writing....! can never handle passions well enough to mould into poetry
u keep writing n dont mind tht i could not write tht typical reply of, "oh thnx, i will incorporate ur preecious comments in my next write ! "
hm?
take care
n thnx really
havent seen what i had written all these years for long, atleast u did it for me
u write very well, keep writing -
Its so easy for you... - it's
its not my hemartia - it's
that its all for the best? - it's
a good poem here, just looks odd to me with the its - it's as you use an apostrophe with wasn't
spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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Wow...I loved this...the lyrics fit in so well, and it was so sad. Best of luck in the judging!
~Merber~
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