By Sins Or By Virtues by luckynsincere at All poetry

I
am lost
in a world of
confusion and despair.
Beauty still unfounded: Seven
seas- or seven walls of confinement
that crest and fall upon the lands of the ignorant.

Seven continents- or seven lush green paradises
that are clouded by hues of violence.
People are disregarded and
values are forgotten,
yet earth
spins
on.

I am lost in a world of misfortune.
Tormented with various
paths to take;
decisions are
final.

Seven
deadly sins
or seven heavenly
virtues; shall I fly above
the flames or sink into the murky waters?

I
am lost
in a world of
hopelessness and chaos.
Time has allowed love to be tackled
by lust, and wrath to overpower tolerance.

Pride stands casting shadows upon courage
like a hideous mask. Greed is
slowly swallowing what
remains of our
freedom.

Wisdom
is tempted
by gluttony; whilst
envy pollutes the truth.
Sloth drinks the pulse from creativity.

I
am lost
in a world of
uncertainty, seeking only
for the knowledge of who I really am.

I have swam in the cruel waves of sin,
and have flown above the
unrelenting flames
of hell.

I
am lost.

Author notes

I took and combined the might of all sins and compared them to the virtues.. as is a battle we all face in life. We have a choice...

this has been my favorite challenge so far in APTP...
Written August 5th, 2006

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A contest entry

The Seven Deadly Sins by Genesis. 1200 points, ended August 20, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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Genesis
August 15, 2008

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Thank you for your entry. This is wonderfully written, pointing out each individual sin...and presenting a choice. I like the way you structured each stanza: that takes discipline. Good message, thank you.
--Genesis.
- luckynsincere
  August 18, 2008
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  Thanks so much for your comment. this was a splendid idea for a contest. I hope you get loads of awesome entries to read!!
  
  Always,
  Melanie
R S Adams Jr
August 15, 2008

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this poem is marvellous
It must have taken ages to create those shapes with those words. You have done well.

The essence of the deadly sins comes through vividly. Maybe we are all lost like this. Brr!
- luckynsincere
  August 15, 2008
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  thanks so much for your inspirational comment. It actually took no time at all to play the words in the shapes. I love to do that. Some like, and some don't
  
  I truly apprectiate your words and hope you have a great weekend!!
  
  Always,
  Melanie
Endeavor
August 12, 2006
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Excellent
Pove the power and tone of the words as made

Incredable message

I have swam in the cruel waves of sin,
and have flown above the
unrelenting flames
of hell.

I
am lost.

If you can say the words as you have, you alone are not lost.
But you know this, and it is a great ending for the words.
FindingFate
August 12, 2006
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Hey hon now that you have posted a fresh one you can enter a prewrite that fits any option in the contest. Just thought I'd let ya know. Thanks a million for celebrating with me...Trina
August 8, 2006
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Wow!
the emotions and depth to which your words speak to me is astounding. to so exquisitely portray the seven seas and seven continents on a most spiritual level of feeling lost and sad is so hauntingly beautiful - i am truly in awe of such outstanding writing. it is my pleasure to read such a proufound and stunning piece of writing~
lynn
Ninth-Poet
August 5, 2006
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intriguingly interested
This is an interesting piece of poetry that has something to which I can't quite describe. It beautifully penned and has alot depth. Very descriptive !

Keep the ink flowing!
and good luck in the contest!
-Dave
Firequeen
August 5, 2006
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this is truly a beautiful piece here
wonderful write hun
Heavenly Angel
August 5, 2006
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KICKIN'!!!!
WOW! You've truly blown me away with this piece, my friend! I am left speechless! This is an AWESOME, AWESOME piece and I wish you all the best in the contest! I think gold will look very good upon your mantle !
Kari
August 5, 2006
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Awesome!
My Sweetheart...you have done a wonderful job hun. I so love the format and the pic with it. It is so deep and enriching. Thanks for sharing sweetheart.

Kari
mina nagi
August 5, 2006
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Mel, I really and truly admire your richness in thoughts and the way you give vent to them… You like challeges, don't you? your words speaks for many of us… I never realised free verse can be so effective and glitch-less … mel I can’t praise you enough…

I
am lost
in a world of
hopelessness and chaos.
Time has allowed love to be tackled
by lust, and wrath to overpower tolerance.

Wow, mel, beautifully thought of and well said…
Good luck in the contest…
mina
Edited on Aug 05, 9:50 because 'typo'.
luckynsincere
August 5, 2006
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Thanks Trina... I loved writing this piece... I was sitting here finishing up this challenge poem... when I recieved your message about the contest... and I saw that "web of destruction" line and the rest seemed to pour out... thanks a million for another wonderful contest
Mel

Happy judging!
FindingFate
August 5, 2006
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Mel this is a wonderful piece. I love the way you mentioned all the sevens...coincidence...I think not. I sometimes feel as if I am lost too. I have also swam deep in sin and flew slightly above the burning flames. It scares me. Thanks for this great entry and best of luck...Trina