Look past the mirrors of my eyes
For what's been given, nothing matters
Tears that fall, heart quickly shatters
Once laid before your very soul
Pure of heart, in love or friend
True gifts of love, till the end
Tears that fall, heart quickly shatters
I wonder, twas it all a game
Broken will, feeling pain
True gifts of love, till the end
Express the words, and I'll be gone
The hurt I caused, must not go on
Broken will, feeling pain
I once laid before your very soul
Look past the mirrors of my eyes
And find the hope to make you whole
Author notes
Ripple poetry
Ok, so I am not like one to often repeat myself in my poems. But recently, I sat down and just wrote, and found that in this particular poem, I became repetitive. Then I wrote another in the exact fashion.
I was asked what kind of form this is, and to be honest I know about squat of form poetry. So if this is technically a form someone else has created, I would appreciate the heads up on it. Until then, I will label it as Ripple Poetry, for the rippling effect it has.
Just for the marking of it, in the case it is not a technical form...yet, here is how it writes.
Line 1
Line 2 a rhyme
Line 3 a rhyme
Line 4
Line 5 b rhyme
Line 6 b rhyme
Line 3
Line 7 c rhyme
Line 8 c rhyme
Line 6
Line 9 d rhyme
Line 10 d rhyme
Line 8
Line 4
Line 1
Line 11 (rhymes with line 4)
My first poem written like this
Silent Echoes
allpoetry.com/Poem/2161140
Written August 4th, 2006
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Thanks hun. Just started writing and out it came. This was the second one, and so be born some stupid form. lol
Storm -
very interesting form right here...
thank you for teaching us.
i liked the poem
very strong and deep...
thank you for sharing -
Thanks for the comment, appreciate it.
Storm -
Lovely poem!
Kimberly G.
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I so understand Jeannie. I didn't think tsunami poetry would sound real good though, lol. Neither did any of the storms, and I tried.
But thank you for the comments. I know we all go through rough patched, I just feel a deluge of them lately. Appreciate your words and thoughts hun
Storm -
Very well written and beautiful. Emotional and touching. I can really relate to these feelings. Writing is a good way to let it out. I wish we didn't have to have the ripples (tsunamis) in our lives at all. Thank you for sharing. Hang in there. All we can do is hold on tight and ride it out.
Jeannie
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Just letting go of a lot of emotion right now. Thank you for your comments, appreciate it.
Storm -
Never thought about it as a sone. Just dumping again. It's either dump, or explode.
Thanks for the comments, appreciate it.
Storm -
Such beauty can be formed in a poem and put it so delicatly
I like these lines you put into it
"True gifts of love, till the end
Express the words, and I'll be gone
The hurt I caused, must not go on"
I cantrelate to this soo badly -
Awesome!
This was very deep...I enjoyed reading it...are you making a song with it?? It is a thought
Kari
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