Creations...
Soft formed perfect shape,
blue sporadic sound
in a dark rapture to compare
woman and ground.
Sailing like a star
from twilight to down,
dashing moves and smile,
queen without a crown.
Picture perfect...
Yet she is a woman
between a laughter and cry
her tears with sea salt breezes
quietly will go by.
Fluttering whispers
from lacy waves foam tide
like a silvery wingtips
helps her to glide.
Author notes
Challenge: allpoetry.com/Poem/2161974
Word bank:silvery wingtips, sailing, laughter, sea salt breezes, fluttering whispers, dashing, picture perfect, creations, dark rapture, sporadic.
Written August 4th, 2006
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Thank you Jynnette for so nice comment. Challenge is my own list with some different writing and most of poems was for contest where I won silver trophy with my poem allpoetry.com/Poem/2257801
It was a circle of contest for points and trophies. Each circle was harder and harder. Enough to be a great challenge. Don't be surprised, it's not always who is the best, sometime it's about contest host taste for poetry, sometimes it is about some other qualities of poetry. I am not sure that I am the best. Each poet has own special poetic world.
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What a challenge this was or can be.... This was nicely written and you have done a great job with this poem as well. One question though- I have never seen anything on here about a "challenge" So what does all that mean? Does someone have to try to write some better then you or what? Well if that is the case I do not think anyone could do any better then what you have done.
Jynnette -
Thank you Ken for your time to read and comment some of my poetic trials.Thanks for applause too.
~Sonja~ -
A wonderful write as you have captured all that she is, a woman with the grace of your quill. Beautiful in every word, thank you for sharing such thoughts and feelings. Have a lovely day, Ken IBT
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Thank you Celticmoon. When I saw word banks given to me I knew what I want to do with words, but anyhow it wasn't easy to make them as a complete poem, and here we are... That was a real challenge.
~Sonja~ -
Oh my dear Sonja this is just simple exquisite in every way. Your words have painted a masterpiece around the bank of words you have been issued. The creativity of your talent within this piece is wonderful...........nicely done!
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Thanks for all applauses from the deep of my heart to all who left them without any comments. I apprechiate their support very much
~Sonja~ -
Thank you dear Linda. I like to play with words. This kind of game always allowed me to build up my imagination and to learn something new. I am glad you like my challlenge result. Thanks for applause.
~Sonja~ -
Outstanding and Beautiful!!
Oh Sonja, I just love where your muse takes you when offered word banks!! This is outstanding and simply beautiful!!! As I have always come to expect with all of your poetry!! Hope you are smiling and well!!!
Have a wonderful day my friend!!
Linda
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This poem was written as a great challenge for a different kind of contest. Now I will have to wait for result to see if my poetic effort will help me to continue with this work.
~Sonja~ -
Thank you.
I am glad you like it.
~Sonja~ -
Beautifully written, my friend!
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Thank you CFH. I was on your site and I enjoyed your poetry too.
~Sonja~ -
Cool poem, blinded along smoothly like a soft breeze through my mind, the imagery too was good. Very nice write!
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Thank you dear Linda. This is a challenge competitions and we will see what celticmon will prepare soon. Your good wishes are always welcome to me.
~Sonja~ -
Such a loud, proud and structual poem you have here very nice, good choice in the style also.. think you have a trophy here, good luck..MM
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beautiful and well Written
Sis Couldnt sleep so I came in here. Got alot to think about. Doctor didnt give me encouring words. Plus legs bothering me. You did a beautiful job on this poem.perfect it is. Iam proud of you -
Thank you dear Janet.
~Sonja~ -
Darling Mummy
You words disarm me
fill me up silently
how my mummy feels
and from that heals.
Smoosh
Janet -
Thanks Sam. Yes, this poem has something of my personality. Anyhow, I am author.
~Sonja~ -
Very strong in her feminity, your woman exhibits human frailties but not spiritual frailty. She is strong and resolute, noble in thought and deed, yet humble and vulnerable to her own feelings. Your poem could be about so many women, I think it has a lot of you in it.
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Thank you mina for so nice comment and good wishes. It worth a gold to me. It was a great challenge to be a part of this kind of contest using a word bank.
~Sonja~ -
Sonja, you've captured the ascence of nature of woman so well...
There are different types of women in this world, but I can see you in this one through your words... you've done a skilful justice to the “word bank”... good luck in the contest my friend...
mina
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Thank you my dear Shahrzad.
~Sonja~ -
hi dear Sonja
A great idea to write about women.
Wish you the best.
Shahrzad
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Thank you Dave.
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beautiful
absolutely beautiful...smile..Dave
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