When I look at you I realize something:
There must be a God to have created someone
Whose very existence is completely and utterly beautiful.
by Sharcu (Tim)
Author notes
I could use lots of big words that no one knows to say this, but sometimes beauty comes from simplicity in the words. I thought of this when I was trying to think up the perfect pick up line one day. Never used it, but I figure it's pretty good. Hope you liked it!
Written August 3rd, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Heartfelt... by Lavender Butterfly.
300 points, ended August 15, 2006, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Tim,
I can see this just fine. This is a beautifully written piece you've done here. Well deserving of the Gold. It actually made my day to read this. What a lovely piece full of heart!
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Hehehe... I feel like an idiot now for reporting it. It wasn't working when I needed it, but now it is. I appreciate all you guys coming to look at it. Been kinda discouraged lately. You guys rock!
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Beautiful !
This a remarkably lovely poem, Tim. The utter simplicity and richness of content is to be admired. I can easily see why it won the gold in the contest
Congratulations
Dee
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Hey Dee When I put in the ticket, I didn't mean to get applauds out of it or even comments... but I really do appreciate your comment and applause... very encouraging. Glad you liked it.
I needed it because I'm going to put these as lyrics to a song I'm writing for my band.
Thanks again
--Tim
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Congratulations on you win in this contest. A beautiful entry indeed
Gaylene -
that poem see very close to you and personal. i really like it good job!!!
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The ultimate beauty of simplicity.............
Very well written...........
Best of luck in the contest..........
Leance
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Actually I don't have a girlfriend right now
But if I did, I'd probably tell this to her. Thanks for your comment 
--Tim -
Awwww! Such fine words from a young one like you!! Your future bride will be so blessed to have you! Noble1
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I agree with seester Frog... this is stunning!
well done lil brother... tis an awesome 'pick up line'!
~Melissa -
beautiful
This pick up line will get you any girl you want any time you want! lol Love it and you are absolutely write, sometimes simplicity is best! This is stuning!
Huggles,
Frog~ -
very sweet
your absoulutly right, beauty does come in simplicity, your amazing and truly and whole heartadly sweet, whoever ur gf is is extremly lucky to have a kind hearted guy like you -
Thank you so very much I guess this is better than entering nothing, right? Glad you liked it
--Tim -
This is truly a lovely sentence filled with such love and wonderment. Thanks for this entry and good luck in my contest... x Butterfly.
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