The silence rings through my mind,
Echoes, nothing but hollow
A lone room with a soul to follow.
Shards of heart crash to the floor,
Beating wild in their plea
Please set me free of this misery
A lone room with a soul to follow,
Left in empty space
Splattered tears stream down my face
Please set me free of this misery,
I need the light of day
A beacon of hope to carry me away
Splattered tears stream down my face,
As shards of heart crash to the floor
The silence rings through my mind
Left alone forevermore
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Written August 3rd, 2006
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Thank you for commenting. I tend to write sensual erotic and dark. But I throw a lot of nature and love into it too. Appreciate your words.
Storm -
I do very much like this poem. You do the spiritualy nature poems like myself. I do not have many poems yet, but I do look forward to read more of your poems.
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Crud Vickie, please don't feel responsible for anything. It isn't you hun. I swear. just a ton f crap piled up at once. It will pass, I promise. Love you hun.
Autumn -
Autumn, again, I feel so much sorrow. I want to close my eyes and cry for you. I know how much you are hurting, and I wish there were something I could do to make it all go away. Somehow, I feel like I have made this worse. In fact, I am almost sure of it. And I hope that you can find a way to get past that, and this. I love you my sister. My ♥ on Valk's wings.
Vickie -
Thank you Curt. I have no idea where or how this came about. I mean, the emotions are there, but the repetition, well, that isn't like me. It was asked if it was some form, and I coudln't even answer, as I don't very often write form poetry, but now I am curious. lol
Anywho, thanks for the comments, appreciate it.
Storm -
A simply wonderful piece Storm, the images that you put forward are magical, as is this really sad message. The presentation is amazing, I love the background. A truly excellent write. - Curt
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Thank you for your comments, I appreciate them.
Storm -
To be honest John, I didn't try to make them fit. I guess I have just come up with some sort of form of my own, huh? And to think, from the queen of knowing squat about forms, lol.
Yes you are too wonderful to end alone, and you won't. Just have faith. I need to find mine, it up and left me long ago.
Thank you for your words, kind heart.
Much love and many hugs
Autumn -
Sad and touching
This is a very deep, sad and touching poem, you have done a wonderful job in showing the feelings that one often feels, this poem touches the reader and pulls at the heart. Thank you for sharing and keep them coming.
raingoddess
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beautifully sad dear one! I love how you've taken lines from the ends and made them the beginnings! I can see how that would make it more difficult too, making the line fit. Is this a particular form? (excuse my ignorance!) anyway, I pray this dream does not come true, for you are much too wonderful to end alone--damn, so am I! much love, John
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