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Serene(complex alliterisen)

Blooming buds release a sweet scent,
And wafting winds make flowers flow gently.
Today the sun shines brightly,
And it holds high my sun-starved spirit.
The wind wafts through the trees,
Making music with laughing leaves.
This perfect place surrounds my soul.

Author notes

the syllable count is 9, 10, 7, 9, 6, 8, 8.  "The Alliterisen is a form created by Udit Bhatia aka The Risen Sun.
Written August 3rd, 2006

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  • Swan song gold member
    July 29, 2007

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    Excellent. This poem has a wonderful smooth flow to it. The syllable count allows a rhythmn to develope in th epoem so nothing seems forced

  • vanyel
    September 6, 2006
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    wow thats really pretty gr8 write and good luck in the contest
    from vanyel


  • Raazi
    August 14, 2006
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    Though recently, I have lost interest in nature poems, this write was extremely refreshing. The image and sweetness of this poem permeates. Mind blowing!