I don't like this place that I am in,
It has made me someone who I never wanted to be,
Someone who I despise.
I hate this person I am today,
All my morals have gone out the window.
I am stuck in this environment,
And I can't get out of it.
I need to leave,
I need to go away
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Written August 3rd, 2006
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well, i felt that way because i was raped, and my morals, i wanted to stay a virgin until i was married, it was something i was willing to do. it is a little bit wordy but it was what came out, i find for me, if i dont do it like that then i tend to find my poems dont make sence. that you very much for u comment
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You and the rest of the world have felt like this. Believe me, I'm there right now, but I'm tolerating myself until I can find a way to change myself for the better. So far, just the hair is done.
I find a lacking of something I can't quite put my finger on. Why do you feel this way? What sort of morals did you hold? Too many words are there, for my taste. Take this first phrase for example.
"I don't like this place that I am in,
It has made me someone who I never wanted to be,"
It could be said this way too.
"I don't like this place, Here I am one I despise", or something along that order, just to simplify it up. Otherwise it was good. Nicely done.
Sweetest of dreams! ~D
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