Beautiful globes of milky white,
Round, as full as the moon.
Each curve is pure ecstasy,
Alluring and sensual as they rise.
Soft is each, awaiting seduction,
Tweaking peaks will surely bring
Sexual anticipation.
Author notes
Written August 2nd, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Fun With Body Parts (arcostic/ erotica) by smiley.
400 points, ended August 8, 2006, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Ummmm, thank you?
Take 'em any way you want, but this set is all natural and always peaked!
Appreciate your very detailed comment, lol
Storm -
Oh, this was super. I'm struggling to find fault. Normally, I'd be plastering paragraphs of negative criticism all over the text box, however, for once, I'm genuinely impressed. Let me read over it again... I'm sure I'll find something to criticise. Hmm, perhaps close-reading will reveal its faults. Well, we have internal rhyme and assonance, which is fun. There are a lot of S sounds: sensual, soft, seduction, sexual. All these 's' sounds create a 'hiss'. Perhaps, you're relating this to man's (and woman's) first sin: being tempted by that snake chap. Of course, breasts have been a fertility symbol throughout history. Today it is agreed amongst biologists that there is indeed a reason why we're obsessed with breasts. Breasts promote fertility; fertility's what life's all about. The larger the breasts, the more fertile the woman is perceived by the man's subconscious. Oh, wait, I'm supposed to be commenting on your poem. Milky white is a nice image, but then, those nice images soon turn into lactating breasts. That, of course, is enough to put a man off sex. Of course, no author can predict what the reader will connote their lexis with. Another example is the word 'peaks'. Now, although breasts perk up, some breasts are constantly perked up... silicon-implanted ones. Yes, synthetic breasts are hardly erotic. The poem seems to focus on the 'pure' and the 'round', and this one word almost changes the whole meaning. I'm getting tired. I do love this, though... you truly deserve my applause.
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LOL, thanks for the comments hun, appreciate it.
Storm -
very good
very good work with this acrostic its nice to see you keeping abreast of things
good luck in the contest with this lovely write.
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Thanks hun, appreciate the comments.
Storm -
What a lovely description accompanied by vivid imagery. Good luck in the contest!
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Thank you for commenting.
Storm -
loved this poem!
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Great imagery
Maybe I should have tried an acrostic for your birthday contest.
Oh well, I'm sure you got lots of steamy writes. Good write here but unlike you, i hate my chest. You can see it coming a mile away! Good Luck in this contest! 
And I see you couldn't do writes on organs so ignore my comment that I left before 8-}
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Yes Tang, I do. It's one of the only parts of me I really like, so what else can I write about? She said I couldn't use an organ, left the brain out.
Thank you for your comments hun, appreciate it.
Storm -
Dear StormGoddess,
And you know darn well I'm a breast man! Oh! Oh! This was fine
Mmmmmm Mmmmmm Mmmmmm!
I wish you the best in the contest!
Tang -
Thanks for the comments, appreciate it.
Storm -
this was good and thank you for entering my contest.... I do wish you the best of luck...
Yvonne
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LOL, thanks for the comments.
Storm -
haha niiice that is crazy and true about some women
I like that good Write
Sexual aniticipation
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