I Promise You
My love will never fade away,
And I will never deceive you.
I will never break your heart,
Because I cherish all you do.
I Promise You
My Heart, My Body, and my Soul,
I will give you all of me,
And remain by your side,
To fulfill your every fantasy.
I Promise You
That I'll forever be faithful,
As well as work to please you.
I will do anything you want,
As well as remain true.
I Promise You
I will make you happy,
And give you all my trust.
I will give you it all,
From love to lust.
I Promise You
That I am truly in love with only you.
By: Jasmine Aburouman
August 02, 2006
3:59 pm
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Written August 2nd, 2006
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This says it all; it is total
This is very well written, word choices and rhyme. It is total commitment.
One should never say (or write) this to anyone you don't ALREADY COMPLETELY TRUST from experience because you have known them for a long time -- and who you see yourself spending the rest of your life with. THIS IS SERIOUS STUFF! But it is very well expressed here, very warmly in beautiful poetry. A fine poem, indeed.
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You know that i love your works, and you fail to disappoint!! You have truly outdone yourself with this one!!! The depth and sincerity of this poem is gorgeous. There is so much emotion presented as well. I absolutely loved the flow.....There is only one line that i feel was a weak point.
I will do anything you want
All of the other lines are promises of unfailing love and faithfullness. But this particular line makes you sound as if you were being led around by a leash, rather that giving your heart to the one you truly love. But nevermind that. Again, i am absolutely astounded by the enormity of your poetic talent. Amazing write!!!!!! bravo, my friend, bravo
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This is a beautifully written poem written with warmth and sincerity! It was a delight to read! I loved it! Well done!
Kiran -
I love it!!!!!!!!! It's sooo sincere and pure.it's rly sweet it makes me actually fall in love just reading it.fantastic!
*Amy* -
It sucks when you love someone, and they love you back, but you both know you have no future together because you belong to different religions and it just wouldn't work out. It sucks when he tells you "If you were Catholic, I would marry you in a heart beat." It sucks when people are forced to choose between their life and their future. I'm very traditional, but after reading so many poetry in my class it really makes you feel for people who are torn. They do say love is blind, after all.
I read a poem so sorrowful, so heartbreaking, it actually beat out Shakespeare. Honestly, I spent the night crying myself to sleep because it would so suck if I or someone of my family or friends was in that specific situation. *sigh*
Anyway, thanks for the comment. I really appreciate it.
Contest Note: Love Is Blind
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4 STARS
Can't help loving this one. Really like your style and you write with so much feeling. Keep the good work up.
loves ya
goody two shoes
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