Drifting back
A life full of time
Darling girls
Daring boys
Yanking on the line
Slowly growing
Leaving in time
Over these years
Venturing in line
Eternity of love sowed in all of our minds.
Author notes
Written August 2nd, 2006 ( Option one )
A contest entry
- Allpoetry One Year Anniversary Contest by Tali28.
900 points, ended June 17, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PIF CONTEST. by Blankscreen2222.
475 points, ended October 15, 2007, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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A very thought provoking piece.
short and yet direct.
Thankyou very much for your entry.
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This is a very loving piece. You show the emotions well in a short poem style. Great write. Best of luck to you in the contest. Take care. '
Tali -
Thanks
Thank you for your entry. After the contest ends I will be back with more comments.
Tali -
good
it maks me think of child abuse this is the image that first popped into my head keep doing well
love papa -
wow
wow this is really good. it has the essence of nostalgia, and it makes me think of the past. a father's love for all of his children. it's really interesting, and it made me think. good job.
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This was a beautifully hopeful poem which I liked a lot, great use of repetition of ‘darling’ here I thought that was a good word to use as it showed familial love well. Keep writing, this was a beautifully hopeful poem of familial love which flowed wonderfully well
All the best
Pozo
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great
I like this ..it makes you think, very nice -
I love your use of words! I espeically liked how you started off with "drifting back" ^__^
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you are a vey good poet! keep your work up!
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outstanding
hello dear...this is outstanding...what great flow and wording...very well done baby....dad -
Wow...this is really good. I really like it....
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this has a steady nice flow to it- mint poem
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