Down to zero with a sickening thud
Back to eternity with the last drip of your blood
You came face to face with the dark woman of death
As she tongued your throat, as you gasped your last breath
Back to the oblivion before the cry of the birth
That echoed in your ears as you emerged, from your mother's girth
Wondering where your energy will happen to be born
Looking for the mythical beast with the single twisted horn
The collective fate of the collective noun
Will cause you to fret and worry, your head to frown
Past the friction of that ungodly and interrupted, intercourse
Ending in a separation, an absolute decree of divorce
Old and grey now, you have had it all your own way
All you can do is think of death and atone and pray
Forgetting the wonders and the mysteries of your earlier past
In a rancid and senile dementia, that will forever be and last.
Georges.
Author notes
Written August 1st, 2006
A contest entry
- Missing [Lyric Inspired] by Pisces Pieces.
1750 points, ended July 24, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is exceptionally written. What a strong and powerful message it contains. I sense lessons of life and maybe even regret. But there is certainly an aire of sadness from my perspective.
You have created great detail and told of a life story in such few lines. Thank you so much for entering and best of luck!
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Very nice, I will have to read it again when I am not so tired, but I enjoyed it. Lovely poem. Much emotion and feeling in this, very sad also. A loss or sadness is apparent.
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::smiles pleasantly::
That was so hot. I fuckin' love that I wish I could applaud you three times. Rock on. I wish I could put as much enthusiasm into my words I type as I did when I defined it to everyone else in the room with me that I insisted let me read this poem to them. I'm adding your name to my favorites list so please keep writing...I don't really know what the promotion thing is at the bottom but I try to do it anyway. -
grand pa pa i hope in the end justice is served, you do not deserve the hell you are currently going through. i love you to death and no one else can say that!
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Damn Good!
Ahh nice discription on lust and marriage, why both don't mix! The rhythme to it is very inpowering! and the rhyme is very well done! Clapture for you because you have writen yet another wonderful poem! Keep up the good work georgy-boy, because I never wanna quite reading it. ~pixie~ -
Great work here Georges, thanks for sharing this!
Allen0826 -
very different
i really liked it
flowed very nicely
keep up the great work
Firequeen -
excellent imagery. 'As she tongued your throat' was one of the most striking lines i've ever seen, it was so vivid to me. your rhyme is done well, which is a rarity (in my opinion), and it all flows well between each line and each stanza. very unique, very creepy, very nicely done.
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Very intriging piece. I enjoyed it alot. Written with alot of thought...great piece
Soulful Woman -
very good writing flowed very easily great job
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I love the rhythme and the rhyme. This was rather unique. I think you did an excellent job on this piece. *claps*
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Alot of imagery and word play.Not quite sure what is being shown.Is the person thinking back on a bad mariage and divorce.
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