so clearly
i see you now
a lovely face
and crimson lips
the blush of lust
deep upon your face
and eyes
the sparkle
of polished diamonds
yet soft and sweet
to greet me
and satin skin
and swollen breast
your parting limbs
caress me close
you hold me in your spell
all around.. your womb
the sent of love
and you above
squeezing.. sweetly.. slowly
all in a dream
i see you
here you
whisper my name
in soft kisses
the voice of an angel
calls me near
and i hear
your words of love
just above me
your motions
pull me closer
i am lost
enthralled in the depths
of your silken soul
you are all i know
then the dawn..
the destroyer of dreams
the distance
falls upon us
i wake again
another dream
By
Lee L.
Author notes
A re-write of a personal favorite
If I could read the words to you.
I would almost whisper the sounds.. in soft slow voices.. giving pause to the measure and rhythm. Just as.. I love you.
Written August 1st, 2006
A contest entry
- closed by honey bear.
300 points, ended August 3, 2006, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I think when someone reads us, and is inspired to write inturn, it is a great complement to our thoughts. I loved it all. Rick
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Your welcome, I enjoyed reading your very good writing. I thank you for your kind words, Rick
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This is so amazingly beautiful! Your words have left their mark and blessed me tremendously.....Thanks for sending me the link....Smiles, Terry
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Thank you Tia, I try to always write soft, this is of corse frm a dream, just words from life, Rick
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This pulled me in... I did not realize until the end that it was a dream. You have a special gift of relaying thoughts into poetry, of this I know. You are an undiscovered talent. ~Tia -
Words and life are both a blend. Rick
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I must look at this as a female and evaluate... they will like 'you are all I know'... you can see the thoughts will outweigh any pretty words... they may not like 'womb' and 'lips', for men should look beyond those... into the heart... may you write many of these...!
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Thank you so much for reading my writing as you are very well known on this site. Rick
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very good
a very good write that pulled me in and carried me gently along very soft and sweet i just so enjoyed it, thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the good work
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wow you paused in all the right spots here Rick. As I was reading it it flowed just as it should. You never cease to amaze me....Trina
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Excellent
Rick,
Another great write. You captured the moment perfictally (sp). Excellent. bob -
Thank you for your kind words. I am almost a dreaming machine..lol Most good. I wrote a dark poem called "Sunday" from a dream. TY again, Rick
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WONDERFUL POEM
Oh my, this was an amazing poem. So beautiful and heartfelt. I kind of know how you feel. Sometimes all we have are our dreams of the one we love. But that is okay. You words were pure poetry. Thank you for sharing. Such a pleasure to read this summer morning
Sandy
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Thank you for reading. You may also like "As I Dream" just below, Rick
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wow this poem is too good to be true, how do you do it/. I have never been very good at writing poems like this and I loved this. THe emotion was so powerful and real as if...well it was great. thank you for sharing
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Absolutely beautiful. Very captivating and loving, with just enough sensuality to keep you reading. Great
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Beautifully written
This is really great. You should be proud of your talent. I really enjoyed reading this. It's so beautiful Exellent job. -
Very sweet poem. I pictured someone whispering this to me, my eyes closed,, feeling the emotion behind it! Very Nice!
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Thank you for reading, your time is appreated, Rick
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poetry in a picture,is this piece,great job
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It best it was Soft Porn, or Satin Porn, I like it, thank you for reading, Rick
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very meaningful. it was dirty... i'm not big on dirty, but you wrote and expressed this topic quite well, I hope you do/did well in this contest. NMNM
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Thank you for reading my words, Rick
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LYNN,U R 2 SWEET
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Aaah haa...this is amazing, what a lovely tribute and brilliant poem! You swept me off my feet there for a second
You are quite the talented poet my friend, like always!
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You may like a personal favorite "Forever and a Day" Thank you for your kind words. What is the meaning of "love the SHARK"
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this is a very well written poem. i love the emotion you have put into it. keep it up and never let your talent die.
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wow this is lovely. very nice. very beautiful and sweet poem
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Thank you as always for commenting, I appreate your words, Rick
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Thank you so much Trista. The result of waking for me is "Alone"
my next poem, Rick -
now why do i have to be the destroyer of dreams, huh?
what did i ever do to you? just kidding, the name, it fits
beautiful write. take care. thanks for commenting on my poem,
it has killed me not to type lately. today, i got some pills to
give me more room to do this, but i try to stay off as much as
possible to heal these things. anyways, take care.
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Rick,
I just wanna say...
This is more descriptive than I remember anything of yours that I've read to date. It is...delicious. Very evocative and seductive. The end is almost like having ice water dumped on you, leaving you sad and disappointed that it wasn't real. But then, I imagine that might be similar to how you feel waking from such a dream. I wouldn't change a word of this. I can clearly see you growing as a poet even in the short time I have known you. Excellent job, my friend.
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Thank you for reading, I like the feel of the words as spoken, Rick
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Incredible words of love and emotion expressed here. It was very good.. very good indeed.
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Thank you Lynn for your thoughtfull comments, perhaps I will join you...lol
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an exquisitely written poem of a most sacred moment two souls can experience - becoming as one. your words are responsive and softly sensual with a feeling of emptiness at the end as you write with much heartfelt emotion to let the reader know that in the light of dawn - it was just another dream. the imagery
you portray is simply breathtaking and very lovingly written.
a beautiful poem - made me feel sad at the end~
lynn
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Cool.. Katie
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Rick, I have read again this poem and I love the soft kisses. I was only teasing you when I said what I said about lust and love on the response to your explanation. No matter what, it is a beautiful poem written from a beautiful heart and soul.
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Katie, you are too sweet and I love your sugestions. Let me comment. First, it is love that leads to lust that leads to a blush. The sent is as is, unmistakable and known from the next stanza. Lastly, thank you for revieling you preferances in a kiss, and I changed this to soft, to please you....lol... Rick
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p s I forgot, good luck in the contest.
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Thank you for being the first to comment. I seldom write sex into my poems, perhaps my dreams are getting better...lol..Rick
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B eautifully written
Rick, this is a beautifully written poem. There are a few suggestions, in a poem so full of love, do you want to use the word lust i.e. the blush of lust, or the blush of love. Also, the aroma of love, or the scent of love? and lastly, wet kisses or moist kisses, personally wet kisses turns me off. But this is only my opinion, it's your poem and you're the boss. -
so sweet once again, your words are lovely and a hint of sexy is in this one, very classy done.... Good Luck in this contest too.... and sweet dreams !!!!
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