I'd like to give to my anger some chance,
distress is companion of my own stance
nobody want to teach me how to do,
the best I ever knew was how to be blue.
Maybe this thought therapy will work,
or maybe I'll find it tricky and lurk.
It will jump to mesh me like a thief
but never I will allow it to be my chief.
How that could be, don't try to see,
I already feel it, now it comes to me.
It starts to grow up deep in my brain
black stickler with red anger grain.
From somewhere deep it rises like a dark
to eat my soul like a dangerous shark.
It drives me over the black painted road
soon it is going like a bomb to explode.
Strange feeling to me this is still unknown
it comes to me like an unpredictable cyclone
Neither try to persuade me nor to insist
while my eyes are covered with d-anger mist!
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Thanks for all comments and applauses what makes me to be reacher for another great poetic experience.
~Sonja~
Written August 1st, 2006
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Thank you Lilac. Actualy it is very hard to me to become angry. Yes I know that it doesn't flows very well. Lately It is very hard to me to write anything. I have to struggle with my muse, with rhyming, syllables...probably I am tired and I need a rest from any kind of wiritng. And my translation is awful too. As you said, we all have a choices, to be or not to be angry. Anger is good because in ma opinion it is not good to keep it to explode at some wrong time and place.
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I think you hit it on the head when you said maybe this thought therapy will work, because we all have choices to make and a good choice to think about would be to stem the anger before it rises to explosive levels...
I love the line 'It comes like unpredictable cyclone' that was a clever way to discribe it...
The rhyming was very nice, but I felt the flow wasn't as smooth as you could have got it...but that is the only thing I could find...and I do realise that the flow is quite difficult because of translation...
Thank you Sonja
~Lilac~
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I am not used to write this kind of verses, it is something like more personal and different, and yes you are right maybe a little bit abstract. Maybe more like some kind on introspection from inside out, so to speak.
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I liked your poem here, it was pretty abstract but not too abstract so that it didn't make sense. Good luck with the contest.
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hey sonja
another nice piece ofwork from u
great going
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Thank you Damselflydreams for your time to read and comment my poetry and for so nice comment and good wishes.
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This is very creative, and the style is very compelling. I like the emotion that comes through your words. Well done. Best of luck.
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Thank you Sam for comment and applause. Your comments and deep review are the best support for somebody like me who is writing on the other language. I think that it's not about your or some other lazyness, it's about temporary muses aid, so to speak. We all have our better or worse days.
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I see this write as somewhat out of character for your persona, but with your amazing range and insight you've done an excellent job (as usual). I think that you reach out to your subject with every write. You make the effort where sometimes some of us get lazy and rely on devices. Very good write.
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Powerful word and very good.
We all go thur anger and the mist is what washes over us and make us not see. Why? Because your mind is trying to calm you donw. and only make it worse if you see what anger you in the first place. This is a very good poem sister.
Love oyu
Morningstar -
A TRULY WONDERFUL POEM
I like this a lot, one does try to over come their anger but there are times when anger wins.
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hi dear Sonja
I was very busy in the last week and couldn't review any poem here. Glad to read your nice poems again. 
Wish you luck in the contest.
Shahrzad
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Oh my friend, this is so beautiful. I wrote a poem for this contest too and found it 'missing' from the contest this morning...very weird, re-submitted though. Anyway, love your poem!
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Thank you for your kind comment and applause. I am glad you like it.
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excellent
Very unique and different poem. Well expressed and written. Thank you -
Thank you. I'll tried to raise my anger. thet's the best I can
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Welcome Sonja
~Lilac~
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