You tore me apart
Like a surgeon examining his patient.
You read me through a blank face.
You knew who I truly was.
We were not afraid
To hold each other,
Or to ramble endlessly
About our hopes, maybe fears.
In some cosmic way,
Somehow, we were meant
To lead the other through hell.
Now you say I have changed.
I have morphed, and become
Something you say
Neither you or I know.
I want to call you.
I want to hear the dial-tone
Relinquish itself to your voice.
Your voice to travel through
The line and touch me.
To embody me and make me okay again.
You say that we may fight too much,
Or argue.
I say that is natural.
You say we do not laugh like we used to.
Like I have been suctioned from humility.
I say that you are wrong.
I say that you are naive and do not know.
Take me back.
I need your touch, your re-assurance
That everything will be okay again.
Author notes
Option 1, and kinda option 3.
Written July 31st, 2006
A contest entry
- Love, Friendship, Etc, Etc. by innocence jaded.xx.
300 points, ended August 4, 2006, 36 entries
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Actually, I didn't fall in love with them. It was my two best, best friends. They completely stranded me without a word (in our friendship, not physically) and I am so depresssed now.
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Wow you used the perfect words to describe what you felt! This was simply amazing! Wow...thanks for sharing this and entering! Good luck!
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This is a beautiful write, but I don't think I agree with it 100%, Mellissa. Maybe like 75%, but there are times where a relationship should end when neither of you are the same person that you used to be. When you're a different person, and the person fell in love with the person you used to be, it may not work out. But still, this is still a wonderful poem from a poet's standpoint. I think it flows along well, and it just has a very smooth flowalong to it. Nice job. Keep it up!
Dan
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