Time goes on quick, but clocks tic so slowly
Hours seem minutes and minutes seem decades
Reminiscing birthdays and open sea
Bar-B-Ques, cloud watching, block party parades.
Oh how I wish I'd taken that advice,
'Don't rush to grow up, enjoy being young.'
For all I've missed, will I have to suffice?
Friends have gone unmade, songs have gone unsung
Now it is time to let go of the past
I'm still young, I need to live in the now
It seems so quick, have I grown up too fast?
Maturity, have I forced it? But how?
Don't be so silly, I know what I did.
Oh how I miss being that little kid!
Author notes
I think I did a pretty good job with my first stab at a sonnet. I believe I've done everything correctly, but if anyone notices any flaws in it, please let me know. 
I think the poem is rather self-explanitory. I never took the advice of my elders to enjoy my age, and I rushed to grow up. I've realized now that that was not the best thing to do! I've also realized I can't dwell on that, and I need to enjoy being the age I am now.
Written July 31st, 2006
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I didn't picture it as a sonnet at all, but it is really nice. I am working a lot harder on my sonnets lately. Check out "Always Confess" to see my first attempt. This is nice though. Really good job dear.
Love always,
Kristen ♥ -
Life what a ride, it's all we got!!!
Age is a state of body not mind. My physical self may age, but I remain a child forever. I'm the crazy Grandpa who rolls down the hill with the kids and at family gatherings you can find me with the children, learning all I can.
Loved your piece, nicely written. However I can't say I'd go back. Life, it's all an adventure. I've been young and want to go to new places.
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Oh, Susan. I know exactly how you feel. Except my parents kind of pushed me into growing up when I was like seven. It sucks I guess, but I'm trying to not think too much about growing up anymore. This one struck home for me, very pretty.
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Your sentiments are heart-felt and real. I too should have listened. Grew up fast, too fast... The one thing I do cherish about my decision-making was having my kids early in life. They are grown now, and I have yet to reach "old age". I think you did a great job with your "first sonnet". I have a problem with iambic pentameter so, you can't get a constructive critique from me in that area. As far as I can see, the flow was just right and rhymes did not seem forced, although, personally, I love forced rhymes. LOL
I wish you the best in this challenge. I love the nostalgic feel of this writ, and the memories it induces.
Much Love,
Renee
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It's a depressing topic... gets more depressing every year.
But you said it well.
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Yay, good poem, Veronica! It's all good and stuff. I really like the meaning behind it.
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