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A Day At The Park

I recently spent the day at the park,
With Jessica and Kayla by my side,
On this trip we all did embark,
With everything packed we were ready to ride.

First there was the miniature golf game,
Kayla played like croquet but she’s only four,
Jessica was ready when her turn came,
One swing and her ball was no more,

The ride on the train was next on the list,
Jessica knew it all she had rode one before,
To ride with Grandpa Kayla did insist,
But soon it was over and they wanted more.

The paddle boats were to be the next pick,
Both had to pick just the right jacket,
Off we all went with a mighty kick,
Half way around and this grandma couldn't hack it.

Bumper boats were to be the last,
To stay dry was to prove an impossible mission,
As the end of the day came much to fast,
We all returned home in an exhausted condition.

Author notes

This is for 2 special little trouble makers, But they are a pair of cuties. Jessica 6 and Kayla 4, my grand daughters..Love you both.
Written July 31st, 2006

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  • freespirit51
    September 1, 2006
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    Thanks ionabuss for your comment. I enjoy writing about my grandkids and my family. If you notice I have many of my works with my family.


  • ionabus
    September 1, 2006
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    This is terrific, love the flow of your words. I love poems that describe a days outing. Nicely told. thanks for the review


  • freespirit51
    July 31, 2006
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    Thanks KB, be sure to ead it to them, I'm sure Jessie will get a kick out of it..


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    July 31, 2006
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    Well, this is a good little memory about your day with your grandaughters......nice job.

    *Ktulu Blackwolfe*


  • freespirit51
    July 31, 2006
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    Thanks Kiss my ax, I'm glad you liked it. Not many people read my writes so I thank you for taking the time.
    Edited on Jul 31, 6:17 p.m. because ''.

  • TerryColvin
    July 31, 2006
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    Very nice. keep up the good work.

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