FADED DREAMS (1)
The future was bright
and the dreams were in colour,
of adventurous lives
and treasures to discover.
There were people to meet,
new friends to be found.
Strange roads to travel
in a world filled with sound.
We would laugh and dance
and love and live.
Imagined that destiny
had but joy to give.
But the years have passed
and the seasons turned -
When we came to realize
that our ideals had burned.
The colours have gone now,
the bright turned to gray.
The future looks bleak
as the dreams fade away.
All that seems left now
as day follows day,
is to wait and to wonder
when the endgame will play.
FADED DREAMS (2)
The party is over and I crawl to bed,
too much to drink and too well fed.
The clock on the stand says the time is two-thirty
and I couldn't care less if my feet are still dirty.
I pull on my PJ's and cuddle up warm,
grateful it's weekend, I can sleep way past dawn.
Softly and gently dreams take me away
to Fantasyland, where I'd like to stay.
The guy in my dream is so sexy and smart -
he likes me so much, wants us never to part.
We dance and we play and love all night long,
our life is so happy, our life is a song!
Then I snap out of slumber and sit bolt upright.
What was it that woke me, that gave me a fright?
My heart beats like thunder and my blood runs cold.
My dream man has fled - he's not very bold.
I check out the time, it's zero-five-ten.
I sigh and I shudder, then I hear it again...
Not a burglar, a ghost or a monster or two -
but the neighbour's rooster: COCK-A-BLOODY-DOODLE-DOO!!
Author notes
I took one title and wrote two completely different poems...
Written July 31st, 2006
A contest entry
- creativity contest round one! by HollyLouise.
300 points, ended August 31, 2006, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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The second poem made me laugh with the last line... but overall I feel that you were trying to be somewhat satyrical(?)
Great job with the 2 poems and the one title.
I haven't been on in a while so I thought I'd drop in quick.
~Sarah
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2 bloody good poems!
Bloody hell there too f***ing good poems. the first one is so sad, but i really loved reading it. The second ones just really funny and i love the ending. The way you put 2 poems under the same title, but made the context totaly different is great!!! I might experiment with that sometime, maybe in geography seeing as i'm rubbish at it.
Once againe, two great poems. Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing,
Holly. -
Very Berry Good
Lacyte very good job . I like the two opposite emotions being used
it had me sad and laughing at the same time
great work
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first write very sad but very true of many as we go through life when goals are not attained or things don't go as planned we tend to focus on there negative aspects and forget to open our eyes to other things that the passing years have given us, very good write though wonderful flow and full of emotion. second write absolutley hilarious i had to smile the whole way through as you have two works with the same title yet so very different in tone, I love dream sequence in writes so I enjoyed that portion less humorus but good none the less and the rooster at the end made me laugh couldn't help it very nice work in both pieces thanks for sharing, peace
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i felt like you were right to not break the beat in the first poem, and that it carried a very mature tone. the second poem might have lost itself somewhere around "fantasyland", and I really feel doesn't stack up with its own competition. That being said, rarely do animals get a chance to speak in poetry... so points for originality.
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Those were both very good. The first one I liked better, I loved the overall feel of it. The second one was sort of..odd, especially near the end, but it was unique, that's for sure. Good job on both of them.
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