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Loves Loss(rhyming alliterisen)

Loves loss is a liars lot;
For his heart is now of naught.
He has scorned his love's lyre,
For fault of due desire.
But before contusions cede,
We will wash him of his greed.
He'll pay for his perversions.

Author notes

"The Alliterisen is a form created by Udit Bhatia aka The Risen Sun.
Written July 31st, 2006

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  • Raazi
    August 14, 2006
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    It depends on pronounciation. Either way, it works for me. Nice alliterisen. First, I didn't really get it, but after reading again, I realized what a powerful poem it was. Great job.


  • TwistedBloodyLilly silver member
    August 6, 2006
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    Really? I thought it was de-si-re. I'll look it up. Thanks. ~Lilly~


  • Poppin Poppy silver member
    August 6, 2006
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    You may want to revise line 4 - it only has 6 syllables, 'de-sire'. otherwise, a nice Alliterisen


  • intanglio2ring
    August 5, 2006
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    Dear TwistedBloodyLilly,
    Wonder Alliterisen you've created here!
    One of love and lying and loosing!
    Good Luck in the contest.
    Tang