No tears fell when he ripped my shirt,
no watery eyes when he lifted up my skirt,
no tears when he ripped my underwear,
Am I supposed to cry?
There were no tears when he pinned me down to the floor,
there were no tears when he spread my legs open,
nope mommy, no tears when he climbed on top of my small frame,
but am I supposed to cry?
No tears when he began to take away my innocence,
no tears when he began to rock back and forth,
nope mommy, no tears when he finished his business,
walked away and called me worthless,
Am I supposed to cry?
Because the whole time daddy whispered to me,
tough girls don't cry.
Author notes
Definitely need to read.
Written July 30th, 2006
A contest entry
- Once More I speak to unsilence the issue by x-Black-Butterfly-x.
6000 points, ended March 8, 2008, 42 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Traumatic Events - Rape by TheGangstress.
600 points, ended June 14, 2008, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I love it. That's all I can really say. This takes on an issue that I haven't seen yet, in this contest, and that is a question of HOW one should actually feel...instead of just feeling sad or depressed, it's more "What should I be feeling right now?" I think that this is very well written and flowed wonderfully.
Thank you for entering my contest, and I wish you the best of luck.
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wow this is so harsh but amazingly written, I'm so sorry this happened to you and I hope you can rise above that monster, always here if you want a friend
I know what it's like but it wasn't my own father I'm so sorry xxx
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omg this is so sad its true omg brutal and harsh but its amazingly written just wow well done
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Brutally good
painful for me to read. But honest emotion leaves me with empty feeling in my stomach. Good poetry makes people feel. You did that.
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ohhh this is soo sad Lord please help these girls. Such a devistating write tough girls dont cry. Very emotional piece makes one realize how important this issue is and shouldnt be ignored.
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These are the ones that tear at your soul. I checked on my own daughter this morning while she slept. Our babies are so innocent. This stresses how much they need our love and protection.
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This really tore my heart upon reading it.
What a painful and terrifying experience for
anyone to suffer. Though I despise the act,
I often enjoy real-life issues like these expressed
in poetry because they often reach the heart.
I would have used stronger words to indicate the
power of his strength in certain places though. Words that connotate bad images.
Example in your line:
No tears when he began to take away my innocence,
Perhaps it could have been stronger with:
"No tears escaped me when he 'robbed' me of my innocence" "robbed" would connotate an image of a man stealing something that was not his right to take.
Overall, you did a great.
Thanks for sharing with us.
Keep penning!
~The INC."
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perfection
very brave and very brave piece - struck a nerve - im completly impressed -simple in form but direct with emotion -
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Excellent form this is a very tough and open poem it took courage to write this and you did it well. I will read again.
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Oh, wow. That is so sad and sounds so scary to go through. I find it sick that fathers do that to their own children. Parents should take care of their kids, not hurt them. This was a strong very emotional piece. Very powerful write.
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wow, that's so sad. It's wonderfully written of course! your poetry is amazing! Please keep writing! This is a strong, emotional piece and you wrote it with emotion, I can tell. Wonderful wonderful wonderful piece.
Monica <3 -
Brutal and Raw
This is a brutal and raw emotionally charged piece. Bone chilling. I love the structure and the imagery in this write. No child ever deserves to be violated. Yet it happens every day. It's tragic and tramatizing to say the least. Thanks so much for sharing. Amazing job!! Welcome to AP!! Take Care!!
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This is a beautiful but tragic poem. It's a sick and sad world out here. It's down right dirt shame the kind of hell some parents put thier own kids through. You expressed that emotion very well in here. It's as clear as glass.
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a work of art
it was the most touching thing i have read so far. seems we have things in common -
wow this was such an emotional peace, it is very well written, it made me cry, which ain't an easy thing to do, it was a suprise to find out who the person in the wrong was but i can def relate, you did well to write this piece. it can't of been easy. tc millie x
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wow....i'm so sorry hun
i can relate to this to much all my life i heard
"big girls don't cry"
and i still don't know how to.....
my father never rapped me...but i have been sexually abused...i know the feelings that come with it but you are not woorthless... he is for being such a coward that he had to break the innocence and tust f a young girl......stay strong...and if you ever need to talk i'm here....my gf chrissy has been through alot to...she could help.......her screen name is dERrAnGEd InSAnItY......you should talk to her and check out her work as well as mine...i feel knowing that others can relate and that you are not alone can help....
anyways...stay strong hun
take care
Tasha
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wow. that is AMAZING and SOO sad. great write
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Oh wow! This is scary! I feel like going home and hugging my mum now! DAMN that's amazing poetry!
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wonderful
Excellent read!
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