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[ That Which Cannot Be Named ] (Long Verse)

 

 


In a Vessel, nestled under Nerubian stones
beyond the coral and ebony curtains.
Rests a Creation
whose contents shall not be unveiled
with details for solicitude of Rationality

Guarded by all Four corners of the globe
with encrypted panels congruous to the Temples of Egypt
and lavished with formations parallel to Stonehenge.
The intricate Vessel designs, only seen once in Tibet
Sacred to all who understand its Value.

This Object of Desire, at one point
traveled In the lucid waters of India and held
in the palms of Mohatma Gandhi
then laid to rest in an undisclosed location.

Emerald gems of acidic liquid
surround and bathe this Vessel
for Hands of Virtue can look upon its Worth
without loss of Life and Limb
but dare not unhinge the Lock of Sanctity
only One Key is the Earth's Savior or Destruction.

Humanity cannot afford to have this Universal Treasure
touched by hands soaked in Darkness.

Man has proven that with a catalyst
from the eclectic pool of Diversity.
The Sins of the Seven would not fail
temptations to powerful for the weak minded .
They bow at its feet
Past, Present and Future
sacrificing of self and others
for the gain of nothing.

Pollutants of every form already have set sail
and the Worshippers of Hates Temple
have been infected with its disease
that does not discriminate.

An oxymoron, but to the Believers
their Foundation appears stable.
Hence, it sits on a cliff of soft sand
overlooking an active volcano.

When the Eyes can Spring clean
with closets free of unnecessary wants
and the Earth's axis, spins in a spiritual direction
without resentment to harmonious change.

Everybody wins in what is referred to as
a war within ourselves, but in this case
no casualties.

The fortune cookie alone
can feed the hungry and the less fortunate
not the numbers on the paper strip, inside.

The Bermuda Triangle stands watch
where the crossroads of Resolution meet
for Da Vinci's Code, still unbroken
has yet to be solved of its Vitality.

The Scientist took the map with him
and the modern day Knights Templar
continue to Guard
similar in some respects, to the contents of this Vessel
which in details, cannot be named
Only FELT.




 

 

 

 

Author notes

Holy Moly! Sorry so long but once I got started...
I could not stop until I FELT it complete...
*FELT*
Freedom= Enlightment + Love + Truth

I entered in support of the Host-not for a trophy and also
to unpack some necessities from my suitcase...
I incorporated different perspectives...
Perspectives...not written in stone by me and also....not siding with any particular Race, Creed or Religion...
Hope you all enjoy...
Written July 29th, 2006

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  • Swan song gold member
    May 10
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    Well deserved gold Bravo!!!!!!


  • Desire gold member
    October 10, 2006
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    and Thanks so much for Your visit Mel
    Appreciate Your time and of course Insightful comments
    immensely
    Glad to see You enjoyed this verse

    I'm Honored and Appreciative to be given an opportunity
    to learn and grow...Memories to cherish~~
    Thank You for Your Support and Confidence
    I'm looking forward to the Adventure

    Many blessings to You
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

  • luckynsincere gold member
    October 9, 2006
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    This poem speaks volumes! I am impressed to say the very least. I find it unique and creative... both qualities I rather enjoy. It was refreshing to read such a wonderful poem. I hope you enjoy the challenges within the group... with writes like this, I am certain you will do very well... challenges will begin as soon as all tweleve players have been accepted. Welcome to the Poetic challenge... I wish you the best of luck!
    Always,
    Melanie

    P.S. Do not be discouraged if things do not start for a week or so... still awaiting players, as you are the first to apply. The first season finals are being judged this week.

  • Sonja silver member
    August 7, 2006
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    Congratulations on your gold.
    ~Sonja~

  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    August 5, 2006
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    The weak-minded would fail to comprehend that temptation and despair are here to stay as long as they go their own way instead of taking wisdom from the spiritually enlightened people who came before them to teach us lessons about how to regain our divine nature. Teachers such as Ghandi and Jesus didn't walk the earth for nothing (although some tend to think so). What I wanted to point out most, aside from your artistic flair, is how you manage to take such a spiritual outlook on things--you balance good and evil (I'd be more inclined to be rid of evil, but I guess we'll always have a measure of it anyway). It's always a wonder to find someone so attuned to their higher self. This is excellent! I adore it muchly--of course, I know you got this from me lol



    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora ("Momma")

  • agazeley gold member
    August 4, 2006
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    If you dont win I cant think why - though it is a bit long for some - a really great piece of writing .

  • Shadow Storm
    August 4, 2006
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    This is an excellent poem. You wrote it beautifully, and I could tell that a great amount of knowledge and research went into this piece. Your vocabulary is amazing, for I never saw so many unusual words incorporated into a poem before. Surprisingly, I have always felt that the myth of Pandora's Box was based on an actual person, object, and event. Wonderful Writing! ~Charles~
  • the original freak
    August 4, 2006
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    i like it

  • Allure of a Rose
    August 4, 2006
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    This piece holds so much beauty, I must admit I'm quite jealous. I have long since wanted to write something like this, it's so wonderful. I loved the way you described things and the words you chose. I'd say more but have not the time

  • DrkPoet
    August 4, 2006
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    Outstanding!!

    Desire, all I say is wow!! I read through it once and that just didn't seem to be enough so back I went a second time to wander through the amazing words you let flow like water. Best to you in the contest.
  • D-Poet
    August 4, 2006
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    A great wordsmith far from their prime

    The poem lets you do a little soul-searching, while in rapture of the bliss of a wordsmith. Although I would've used Praetorian insted of Templar, only because the knights were more of an elite force, like Seals or calvary, and the Praetorian were actual guards of the Caesar.
  • Sunshinegf
    August 4, 2006
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    was very gald to read it

    lovely work on this i loved it

  • Token Massacre
    August 4, 2006
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    your poem makes me stop and think. It's well done keep up the good work. I think you might want to add punctuation though a lot of it reads like a run on sentence. I can't wait to read more of your work

  • earthstar
    August 4, 2006
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    awesome

    very creative with such a word picutre visoin very good and very well wrote with a creative flair that add to the over all write i like how you combine the sense to draw the reader in then the impact of wisdom at the end we all are seekers in this life very well done very great write i enjoyed it greatly thanks for sharing have a wonderful day
  • gaerielle
    August 1, 2006
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    Holy cow!!! your poem does envision all the right channels. Your poem inspires greatness.. I wonder if strength challenges authority and restraint in a strong democracy? Is happiness a free pursuit? Breathing bodies with night torches in gardens for the greatest good.. Our lives as rivers in the majesty of parched lands and streams in a majestic sense of appreciation. Meaningful directions come from temperate hearts which have passions "channeled" for the greatest good. Bundles of passions, desires, emotions and feelings all inherent to a great good or evil.. laying down burdens or pampering dangerous appetites.. the pride of self-conquest by the unchained self or the teaching of our godly nature in true victory.. it's all about a principle within.. i will honor your poem - ouff it must be that coffee
    Edited on Aug 01, 3:49 p.m. because ''.

  • debilynn gold member
    August 1, 2006
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    I agree with Will Iam!

  • gullionmar
    July 31, 2006
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    wow what a great poem lots of intricate detail makes this a excellent piece great imagery wonderful job
  • TalkvaRevolution
    July 30, 2006
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    Definently

    I like it a lot, but I can't grasp it in entirety (part of the reason why I like it) I'm intrigued with some of what you've done. One question is why are you capatilizing certain words in your sentence. Is it just to emphasize them or is there some other importance in the words that are capatilized? I think the 9th and 10th stanzas are my favorite. I love your word choice and how you put everything together. Definently worth a read.

  • AgeofAquarius
    July 30, 2006
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    A weSUM

    kewl write... seems like "one tin soldier"...

    Listen, children, to a story that was written long ago,
    'Bout a kingdom on a mountain and the valley-folk below.

    On the mountain was a treasure buried deep beneath the stone,
    And the valley-people swore they'd have it for their very own.

    So the people of the valley sent a message up the hill,
    Asking for the buried treasure, tons of gold for which they'd kill.

    Came an answer from the kingdom, "With our brothers we will share all the secrets of our mountain, all the riches buried there."

    Now the valley cried with anger, "Mount your horses! Draw your sword!" And they killed the mountain-people, so they won their just reward.

    Now they stood beside the treasure,on the mountain, dark and red. Turned the stone and looked beneath it...
    "Peace on Earth" was all it said...
    Awesome story but I was hopin for a grand moral statement...


    FELT is an interesting concept...Im not sure I get it though...
    can you elaborate on FELT...

    Edited on Aug 05, 4:09 p.m. because 'Not Enuf Sed'.

  • wings of an angel
    July 29, 2006
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    very nice write that you had penned here your rhythm flowed beautifully throughout the whole poem good luck in the contest

  • Iohagh
    July 29, 2006
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    Darling Desire

    Written kes,y recited lock
    and magically Pandora's box
    all with parts scattered
    inside joy eternally shattered.

    Smoosh

    Janet
  • Clovis6790Curious silver member
    July 29, 2006
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    Superb/Inspiritual

    Incredible write; fan tas tic to read.
  • Vera Rich gold member
    July 29, 2006
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    A neat and ironic piece...

    But PLEASE - it is a little unfair of you to tempt readers in by saying that this is a "long "poem when it is a mere 58 lines...

    Long, to me, would mean at the very least 250 lines!

    However, I suppose in comparison with the plethora of micropoems around nowadays, one has to be thankful for small mercies.-

    I shall try to come back to this to critique it when my head is clearer - at present I am on a course of heavy antibiotics, and cannot concentrate properly!

  • Rainbowgasm
    July 29, 2006
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    Wow. This is incredibly amazing. Keep up the killer work

    ~ImmortalUndead~
  • Peach Chobit
    July 29, 2006
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    Woooow....

    ... In the words of anyone and everyone on the internet.. 'omg'.
    I am totally impressed... I mean,seriously...

  • WritingKitten
    July 29, 2006
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    Ok....... I have chills. Not too many pieces this long do I read but this one is WELL WORTH IT!!! It is amazing, so descriptive, so powerful. I am glad to have read it. You should so be publishing this stuff, you are sooooooo good. No.... wait...... you're better then good, you're great. OMFG what else can I say.

    Where the Crossroads of Resolution meet
    for Da Vinci's Code, still unbroken

    I swear, when I read that my hair just stood on end, and I seriously thought someone was behind me. It was just that freakin awesome. Okay I will shut-up now. But...... you are an EXCELLENT writer.

    Katie

  • abernaith
    July 29, 2006
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    in writing, as in all endeavours,
    one looks to the humble mustard seed,
    which holds in its simple shape
    the elements of grand

  • YoureNoGoodForMe silver member
    July 29, 2006
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    wow this was simply just...wow. I'm in awe right now. this was amazing! the picture, too, was perfect! and the words you used...i didn't really understand some of them, but it made the poem more unique! i've never been good with words anyway so it doesn't matter! anyhow, this is, like, really good!! good luck in that contest!
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