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My Sweet Baby



Innocent eyes staring back at me,
A look of wonder and a look of glee;
Oh these eyes staring into my soul
Making my heart feel complete, whole;

You are my guardian angel that protects
With a love so genuine and complex;
When my heart is crushed and broken
It is you whose encouragement is unspoken;

Just like everyone else, you have some flaws
Like the hair that gets between your paws,
But to me your flaws don’t really matter,
Always making me grin when on the floor they patter;

You are my sweet baby and forever shall I love,
A love that I doubt anyone could conceive of;
You have found a special place within my heart,
I will love you always
(even if you make a stinky fart)


By Sharcu (Tim)

Author notes

Option: 1

I thought I'd add in a little humor and fun in at the end (plus I needed something that rhymed with heart, ). I wrote the poem from the perspective as if the dog were my own since I thought that would be easier and a better effect. A couple of the lines from the poem were inspired by lines from the contest holder's example poem that was given.

The first stanza was inspired by the picture, second stanza inspired by the option description and then a part of the poem. Third stanza was inspired 5th and 6th line in contest holder's poem. Last stanza was just a conclusion.

Thanks for reading!
Written July 29th, 2006

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  • Night Phoenix
    February 14, 2007

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    That's such a cute picture.

    The humourous twist at the ending was amusing, and it was clever of you not to put it in bold. I can imagine a beautiful dog running across the kitchen floor just now...

    "You are my guardian angel that protects
    With a love so genuine and complex;
    When my heart is crushed and broken
    It is you whose encouragement is unspoken;"

    Four AMAZING lines. Nicely done! You deserve that gold!!!

    Happy, happy, HAPPY Valentines Day, Tim!

  • rdlexy
    October 21, 2006
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    swell

    I actually really liked this one.
    It was all sweet, and cute.
    Then you read the last line and it's kinda all lost but it did make me chuckle. bravo.


  • Sharcu silver member
    August 13, 2006
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    Not many other poets entered, that's why I got gold Thanks for the encouragement, though! When I wrote the poem I had two choices for the ending, what I had, or using the word apart and saying something like: "It kills me everytime we're apart." I thought using the fart worked. I seem to let the rhyming words dictate where my poetry goes. Heart and fart happen to rhyme so that's the way it went. Wow... this is a long response.
    --Tim


  • RevHead
    August 13, 2006
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    that was kool I loved reading that... You hava a way with making even the most sweet things funny... i love the quirky twists Awesome piece, I can see how it got GOLD NMNM

  • Sharcu silver member
    August 10, 2006
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    Why thank you very much, Jenna I appreciate you taking the time to read this poem and to leave me your words of encouragement. Hope you are having a great week and I'm glad to see you spending some more time on AllPoetry lately
    --Tim

  • patheticpoetic89
    August 10, 2006
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    Hey Tim, I was just reading around on allpoetry and i read this poem and not only is it adorable...it's just dripping in your talent! Man, I like it a lot. You are a very good poet. You're one of the best that I've ever known.

  • Sharcu silver member
    July 29, 2006
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    I'm glad you didn't mind me using parts of your poem. I've been in the mood to revising my poetry and thought I'd use part of your's. Thanks for hosting and good luck with judging your contest
    --Tim

  • Master Shake
    July 29, 2006
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    Wow! That was a really good poem. I only have two entrants so far but I can tell already this is going to be a very tough-to-judge competition. I really like how yoou used some of my poem in yours. It made it sound realy nice and sweet, and the end was very humorous. And thankyou for adding in the comment box that you used part of my poem.
    Good Luck In My Contest
    *PPG*


  • FlurryOfDancingFire
    July 29, 2006
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    Laughiness

    Hahaha, this was great! At first it sounds like a very sweet loving poem, and then you read the end and you can't help but laugh. I wish you luck as well

    ~FoDF

  • Sharcu silver member
    July 29, 2006
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    Thanks for commenting, Kara I thought the humor would be a nice touch. I agree that the dog is cute as well. God bless,
    --Tim


  • OnlyInMyDreams
    July 29, 2006
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    the dog is so cute!!!!and i loved this poem, andadding that little bit of humor completed the poem! Great job!

    XOXOX
    Kara


  • Warrior of Peace
    July 29, 2006
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    Such a warm , kind poem. I love it. Keep up the awsome writing. I enjoy reading your work.

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