There is a river of stars above us
Guiding us through life and trials
Whispering to the trees and wind
That we’ve got miles and miles still…
Treading our thin Milky Way path
We swim past the moon
We are put together so well
Perhaps not star-crossed but who can tell?
The constellations guide us
With one anchor star pointing northward
Move onward
Gravity has no bearing here
The indescribable air of love
Brings to men the most confusing thoughts
The most absurd actions
The highest ethereal element of human feeling.
Author notes
For Seanny. 
Written July 28th, 2006
A contest entry
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900 points, ended February 20, 2007, 55 entries
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Astronomical Romantic
The dissolve between astronomy and humanity is breath-taking. I love the metaphor of "that of which we are made"--star dust--coalescing somehow into the mysterious universe of romance. It is a perplexing piece that almost seems not quite finished or focused enough, but on numerous re-reads, reveals to me layers of meaning. Am I making more of it than I should? I don't know. I also am not sure whether or not to add to this would be blasphemy! If the revelation could unfold just as beautifully, then, yes, I would add more to this equisite piece. Check my humble music on all things planetary at: www.nakedadam.net
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well as with everything i write--you will find more meanings (perhaps more meanings that i as a writer would have ever intended, which in itself is the greatness of poetry). i also have many allusions in this piece..the anchor star, the star-crossed, and miles and miles still...
i dont think you read too much into it...perhaps pointed out something new to me tho... thanks so much for your review
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veary true,, the end is the strongest in this one,,, but who doesnt get losted in the stars
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I really like this. There is great imagery in this piece and how the 7th and 8th lines rhymed seemed to add to the piece, though honestly I'm not sure how exactly.
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Awesome
I couldn't help but to start laughing at the very end of this piece... Not out of mockery or discontent but the truth in those words that apply to me and possibly others. I mean, experiencing such a romantic moment surprisingly can confuse a moment of such compassion... The scent in the air, the stars in the sky, and the significant other you're attending with looking enchanting as ever... I don't know, very good piece. One of my favorites yet and I don't like love poems at all... Wow... Thanks for yet another great read
Alex
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I like a lot of the passion you invoke throughout the poem. Its nicely written, the absence of gravity was nice with its many ways one could interpret such a phrase, it was generally a well recieved poem. Cool title as well.
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Keep in mind who for the betrayal is for. Keep in mind who this is for. Note the difference. Note the time. You'll see why the emotions are so altered. And why I feel the way I do now. The hurt contrasted to this love. Thanks for commenting...means a lot to me.
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I really liked the last stanza,
"The indescribable air of love
Brings to men the most confusing thoughts
The most absurd actions
The highest ethereal element of human feeling." to be honest, I've never heard of it described this way. Just to see it being so honest, I bet, especially when/if dealing with women.
Well done, the kinda space theme, with the stars.. I see stars a lot, they're so beautiful they must inspire many. It's made for a very fine poem.
Thanks for taking the time to enter, best of luck. I'm sorry about the delay in commenting and judging.
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Beautiful
I am looking for that star and at least have begun to find an anchor, keep on pointing nort. -
Beautiful write. I liked the lines:
"There is a river of stars above us
Guiding us through life and trials"
This has very beautiful imagery in it and also like the idea of the stars as guides. Very interesting concept. I liked this poem. Keep up the good work.
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I can hear soft music playing behind this.........felt like I was floating along with you...........lovely!
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