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Come Dance With Me



Let us dance until the morning comes
Dancing to the silent beat of the drums
Dance with me oh beautiful mockingbird
May our sweet laughter continue to be heard
Ringing out through the riches and the slums

by Sharcu (Tim)

Author notes

I have tried going back to revise this one after I wrote the last word, but I can't seem to fix it to get the same feel. When I first looked at the picture it looked as if she was dancing. So that's what I wrote on. The second line is simply that we see children dancing, but to no music. Hence the silent beat. The last line is simply a message of hope... if you're happy, express that joy and help others be happy as well... both rich and poor need happiness in their lives.

Hope you liked it! Thanks for reading!
Written July 28th, 2006

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  • Polaja Greeters member
    February 14, 2007
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    Hood-Winked! (Happy Valentines Day)

    I really like this piece ... it reminds me a little of a chorus - although I'm not saying it isn't wonderful on its own. I love your explanation, you speak as poetically as you compose.

    Stay smiling and keep writing

    Polly


  • RevHead
    August 17, 2006
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    nah i dont think this needs changing I love the way you expressed it you did an awesome job NMNM

  • NbutnoJ
    July 28, 2006
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    hey dad-this is really cute and prettyful..lol lol i liked it lots keep up the gr8 work bye!~Naty


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    July 28, 2006
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    Sharcu, this is so pretty, I loved it..thank you for sharing this beautiful poem with us..MM


  • xSallyxDollx
    July 28, 2006
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    Awwww this was so cute and beautiful When I saw the title i had to come see it and you really didn't disappoint me; it was short sweet and perfect. I would say good luck in the contest but I doubt you need it Hope you're doing good hun! God bless ya

    ♥Jordanne♥


  • Abreadcrumbandfish
    July 28, 2006
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    Whoa, this is GREAT! I love this, it's very unique. I had a feeling of peace when I was reading this. EXCELLENT job. Good luck!


  • July 28, 2006
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    Faboulous

    That was just fantastic..I am really suprised that this beautiful feature invokes different thoughts in the mind of the reader..it is so beautifully penned that u have left me speechles..excellent job..thanks for entering and good luck ..

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