Sometimes when I’m walking and turn around quick,
my head gets all queasy, my stomach feels sick.
I crunch and I bang and I hurt and I see
that I have stepped-out and smacked right into me!
Completely dumbfounded, I say to his face,
“What right do you have to be here in MY space?”
“As much right as you!” was his somber reply.
(An honest remark that I could not deny.)
“But, I was here first!” I spit out with a sneer.
“You left and came back”, he said, “then I was here!”
We started to circle, preparing to fight.
I struggled to think how to prove I was right.
“It’s MY life to live so you leave it to me!”
“No, it’s not!” he replied, “or else I would not be.”
“Then, tell me”, said I, “why should you be at all?
Because if you don’t answer well, I'll start a brawl!”
He laughed for a moment, then said, “Fair enough.
I’ll answer your question, though you’re not that tough.
I’ll say why this meeting is coming to pass
and if you don’t like it, then I'll kick your ass!”
“I carry those things with which you will not deal.
That’s why”, said myself, too, “I have become real.
The number of things you ignore or won’t do
is so large that I just might be bigger than you!”
I cried, “I’ve created a monster I see!
And to make matters worse, that this monster is me!”
We circled some more, my mind filling with shock.
Then, I calmed myself down and began to take stock.
“So, what can we do”, (I decided to stall)
“to resolve my identity once and for all?”
“We could wrestle.”, he said, “And one might win someday,
or we could simply waltz 'till we both pass away.”
“As long as I lead!” I emphatically said.
He laughed, “Could you not?”, then he just shook his head.
We waltzed and we waltzed, just myself, too, and me,
‘till the dance was the thing, and we both ceased to be.
Author notes
Written July 28th, 2006
When your brain fights itself the internal dialogue takes over. Stop fighting and listen silently. New neural pathways will develop, and there will be no more voices. The information can be communicated much more directly.
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Are you (BOTH) serious??? What or who have I gotten myself inot
I knew there wa more than meets the eye. One of you id more tham enough. hehehe Here, have 3 bunnies, you can each have 1 and a half. hehehe x
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An excellent poem. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Sometimes it is best to waltz than fight...esp. with yourself. Loved your author notes. Excellent write.
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Oh what a delight! And some solid wisdom as well
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Awesome take on your prompt, and an interesting scenario set up, for dealing and facing internal conflict. Battling with oneself, can prove interesting. You've demonstrated this well.
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Seems like I chose a good poem to make me smile. Thank you for that. Tired and brain dead, but otherwise doing okay. Hey, I like the Orson Wells avatar. Tell me about your summer so far...
Love, Lane
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Unless a few neuro-transmitters have dropped shipped and can't find their way back home... along the lonely neural-highways...hehe! You are always a such a joy to read... And this is a masterpiece!!!
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I discovered a poemie ...
which I wrote in my first comment in 2006, inspired by this wondrous poem of yours, which I think I must post ... What do you think?
Well.
Let me see ...
Blessed be, Poet.
Love
Always Myra
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I think you should do whatever your huge heart desires!
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Hard to stop the fight of inner dialogue tho!
Loved this... how the two different sides of oneself were battling!
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Wise and clever
I like how you turned shadow boxing into the dance of life. We have to come to terms with what we don't like about ourselves, because we will continually run into them until we do. I like the personification and the dialogue. There are ways to turn the inner argument into a more peaceful discussion. This poem is a very easy lesson to take.
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I am impressed with this write. I like the insightful side of your poetry. I like that fact that it has a message. This is indeed something we should all watch out for. Thank you for penning it with a touch of class and humor.
Jin
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Bravo!
hahaha, beautiful! Absolutely fun to read! I loved it! It had a fun "Dr Seuss" feel to it, which is a style I am attracted to, and find myself writing like when I am in happier spirits. I really loved this Allan, wonderful job! You sure made me smile, it was cute, clever and wonderfully put together!
"So, we waltzed and we waltzed, just myself, too, and me," <<<
Jess
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KEWL! Not only is it funny but it is paradoxical! I love it! HAHAHAHAH!
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Great
Very interesting....never thought of life that way but you hit right on it...and you made me think. Thank you. Great work. -
I shal be delighted to dance with you.
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So which will I take on, the you or the hue?
which one will then follow: the you ...or the you?
and who will you answer to: I or ... the I?
so let us not wonder -- let's give it a try!
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