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Sweet Pain Death

I tremble at the words I cannot say
for such my lips are unavailable
though I am silent there is still a way
creating untenable potential

Left only with my simple metaphor
a shadow of what I want to convey
which leaves me wanting desperately for more
as I embrace the reason for this stay

For now my left eye does not match my right
my hands and arms refuse to move in sync
I struggle heavily to keep in sight
parameters of what I am to think

The task is large, the stipend cold and stark
To change the world, and yet not leave a mark

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Written December 9th, 2005

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  • PerVirtuous gold member
    August 20, 2006
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    The only positive changes one can make upon the world leave no mark, for they encourage others to leave theirs. It is a paradox, but once resolved, one can die sated.

  • myrataal silver member
    August 20, 2006
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    Splendid

    Strangely enough, I thought I commented on this poem -- what an awesome way to say:

    To change the world, and yet not leave a mark

    Some words just leave me breathless.



    Myra

  • PerVirtuous gold member
    August 15, 2006
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    Such a compliment. I see through it, baby! You are an angel! I am not fooled.

  • babys-no-angel
    August 15, 2006
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    excellent

    you have a way with words sir
    just introduced to this site by a friend she was right about you

  • PerVirtuous gold member
    July 28, 2006
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    You are too kind.

  • Kiran silver member
    July 28, 2006
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    Another great poem, this one also had great imagery to it, was very visual. Brilliant!
    Kiran
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