Shadows dancing in the moonlight
As her form moves into view
Upon the cliffs she stands enchanted
Eyes fixed on craggy rocks below
As the sea tosses up in anger
Waves wash upon the shore
A single teardrop falls in sorrow
To the depths of horrors throws~
Fingers soft rose petals
That were once the sign of love
Dropping softly, gently resting
On the rocks were his doom~
Even now she walks onward
Still haunted by that fateful eve
Silent now the screams of terror
Dancing on the moonlit grave~
Author notes
Written April 6th, 2003
Pic found at:http://dark-shadow-oxxy.deviantart.com/art/Stormy-Haunted-Castle-
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Oh wow, such a sad tale!
Marvelous imagery and flow in this piece.
Wonderful job
♥ Kate -
although sad, it tells the story with so much conviction. it is haunting in its beauty and it compells you to read it. the hypnotic feel it has puts you into a trance of beauty. my best to you in the contest.
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Excellent
A sad note in this one. The background of the sea gives a special lift to the poem. Great job. Don
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Your poem conveys a definite somber, romantic, tragic, almost spooky mood. Very nice.
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Such a heartfelt sad write, sis. As always, full of wonderful imagery.
Great job~~~Good luck in the contest.
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Macabre is right, very dark and goes so well with the picture.
Very Nice Sis....Best wishes in the contest
Bro
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Hauntingly beautiful with the poet's special touch that is uniquely lovely.
Chills and smiles from this one.
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What a dark and wonderful write. As always, love your awesome imagery. Great work Sis..
Many blessings
love,
Linda
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an elegant poem with splendid lines that spark out choice imagery! lovely writing, dear poet! impressive work that deserves attention and appreciation! ah lol i just threw a poem in for the smile of it, i don't think she even knows who i am
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What a wonderful picture sis!! I love old places like this one. Your poem of course, is overflowing with imagery and depth like always. Thanks for sharing with me.
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A hauntingly, dark, beautiful poem, Sis
It has great imagery, makes the reader anxious to reach the next stanza.
Sad with a mysterious glint to it and the picture is good with it
Good luck in the contest, Sis
Dee
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Good, dark poem, Sis! I think you meant to say "On the rocks which were his doom" in the second last stanza. If you remove "the" from "Silent now are screams of terror", you won't have two 'the's' in the last stanza. Otherwise, it's great! Love the pic'! Best of Luck in the contest!
Love you, too!
Maureen
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Gorgeous! I loved the imagry. You never fail to impress me.
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"Fingers grasp the very rose petals"
Significant, the need to hold on---
to hope, to love, to the future....
love and hugs,
M-C
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Wow
Amazing write. So well written. Many blessings in the contest.
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Very nice imagry...Loved it
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I also found this a haunting lil piece, and think that the fact that it leaves you wanting for more, a compliment to the writer, intriguing tale and well weaved.
thank you again
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I knew you could do it. A very good poet can write happiness, sadness, fear, anger ... and you have proven it. Noce job Blushy.
Sag -
do not touch it
WOW ....make this into a novel, answer all the questions , who were they , what happened etc etc. I saw a picture of this in my mind ............the petals dropping, one by one .........a wonderful write { so sad and mysterious }
Thx for reading and commenting on mine. I im'd but not sure it went through. Been having a lot of prpbs lately with the im thingey {{{{{{{{{{{ hugz for your experience }}}}}}}}}}}}
love ,
Reenie
BTW , all is good here , just really busy , but try to make time to stop at AP as often as i can
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=( all i can picture, is a lover comming to meet her beloved for a midnight trist..only to discover his broken body on the rocks below. i love the imagery in this, and how sad it made me feel afterwards.
this is beautiful.
Nyx... -
morbidly scrumptious...
Hi, thank you for your kind words on my page... I appreciate it.
What a great poem this is, a beautiful picture it paints for me. Very painful, I cannot quite describe it, but it feeds some demons in my head. It makes me happy though, a very dark atmosphere...
thank you for sharing...
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Excellent! Well done!
Sad story well told! Very dramatic and vivid images in this fascinating poem! :
n the rocks which were his doom::
Love Ya, Sis!
<3 Maureen
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very good!
Very haunting piece..mysterious and atmospheric
Great title too..and great pic (Eileen Donan castle in Scotland?)
I agree this could be longer but its very good as it stands.
Respect - Alan x -
Oh geez Susan she lost her love to the sea?? Sniffles
Beautifully penned hun...sad and haunting but the images were just beautiful...made me sad too
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definitely a dark write. Edgar Allen would sure give you a thumbs up on this piece, but since he is not here to do so....I shall.
Great content and form.
WSD -
Sis this could be a lot bigger.. I want more of the story.. why!! who..when ..where etc etc
LOLOLOL I really liked this..
Well penned my friend
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Wow mournful write, yet beautiful imagery. Nice work and once again wonderful display.
Red
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