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Visions of Death

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Visions of Death


A twisted
mangled
wreck.
Leaving only
destruction
despair
and death
in it's path.
Carnage
surveyed.
Bodies
bloodied
bruised.
The body count
rises.
The death toll
takes its
victims.
The masses
lay
wounded
dead.
In a crimson
field of
blood.
Some lay
suffocating.
Praying for
death.
Others
mutilated
torn apart.
No mercy.
No chance.
Nothing lives.
Just death.
Pain
Suffering.
Death.

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Written July 27th, 2006

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  • DancingShadowCorpse
    August 27, 2007
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    I liked it, but not as much as the other two entries I have read. I did enjoy reading it, and I liked the lengthyness you took it to.. drawing it out.. up to the end.. death. Which is the end of all things, death. Anyway, thanks for your entry.


  • DancingShadowCorpse
    March 6, 2007

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    I like this poem because it creates an image of gore and death, the structure is nice and it flowed rather well. Thank you for entering!


  • Alleksa Jan
    January 16, 2007

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    Blows away

    Oh wow, that is a real atomic bomb in terms of its power and impact. It is like a bird's-eye view of a batter field. Your visions of death are just so realistic and so close to the going-ons of this world - I'm impressed.
    The poem is written in a very original form and is very organic. I'm very pleased with the flow and rhythm.
    The ending is perfect - so striking and so piercing.
    Overall, amazing piece of poetry that will for sure make my judging in this round even harded than it already is.
    Thank you for entering and good luck!
    Regards,
    Jan


  • Abreadcrumbandfish
    July 28, 2006
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    WOW, where did this come from? This is.....different. I like it, don't get me wrong. I like the form too, good choice on that.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    July 28, 2006
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    wow, this is jsut great, you did a wonderfuly job on this, i mean wow, keep it flowing. lol, you know their are many visions of death and this kind of inspired me to write something, keep it flowing


  • Methusala
    July 28, 2006
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    hmm.... visions of death indeed. What's up with the way it's done? I like it tho.

    ~James


  • Hersheys Kisses
    July 27, 2006
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    wow, this is different than your usual. curious as to what exactly it's about though...It makes me think of a car wreck.


  • freespirit51
    July 27, 2006
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    Great write Pat.. Sounds like you were thinking Cival War again.Love you..


  • Vampyric Kitten
    July 27, 2006
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    Interesting.. Makes me think of a battlefield. I lvoed the images it brought to mind. A great write hun.

    Kitten


  • Erotik Rose silver member
    July 27, 2006
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    OOOOOOOk.... well this is different great job with it, nicely done.

    I Love you
    Elizabeth

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