What hyperboles can knife the earth
when peace must bleed from the rainbow,
capsizing corpses from its See
and marks each unknown grave,
those glassy holes-
someone’s
eyes.
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Written July 26th, 2006
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Your style of poetry is intriguiging ,
Your style of poetry is intirguiging and new for me. I love the way it launches my imagination to make it's own interpretation. Strong imagery of a bleeding rainbow and eyes as glassy holes. -
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Either it's me or it sounds quite deeply political, but that doesn't matter. I like how you used an actual literary term inside of a poem, no one in my class has the guts to do that.
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I'm glad to see that you found the society element in this "Duette", and thank you for completing its form by interpreting it.
~~ In most ways, we get to see the soul
of another through the light (or darkness)
of the eye. Minimalist in terms, that means
we are definitely accountable to whatever happens to us. Each of us.......is a peg in the square.
Bless you, CookieZeal
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This has so much depth and brings me to so many images with each verse. I like the serious nature of this piece. You hold true to your eloquent style with the gravity of this piece and bring it to a human level with the concept of "eyes". It's a tremendous write Cookie - one to bring us into reflections that can't be discarded easily. There is so much strength in this piece and you give us that strength in the impact of your words chosen so carefully. - a great write. - Kimmie
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Yes. I am from the Catholic upbringing, and the idea of the 'See' always perplexed me. The fact that it implied
something so much bigger than we imagined.
Your take is very well sensed. Thank you. It's a viable
interpretation that I like. Much more, but as it is
with profound meanings, I like to think on them.
Mary, darling...thank you so much! -
Rof........I like how you think. The words
you use push me to another place
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now it makes sense. Damn sometimes the eyes see and don't see and the head is with the see but not in the see and somewhere all is lost till tandem brings back the pattern of all and we ...see!
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I enjoyed this, because it speaks of deeper meanings, and although I am not getting "it", I can appreciate this write, I wish I could still think in these terms, great piece, and thanks again for your help on my piece season to heal, which is now Time to Heal,
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Oh, and I wanted to add fascinating word pics.
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Back again.
I don't know. Taking into consideration the picture's vagueness or unclarity I get the feeling life's an illusion in "someone's eyes" and to spear the truth is anyones guess. The See is stifling in that I'm thinking of the Holy See of Rome which I'm inclined to interpret as being in question.
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With 'peace' singular as the subject, it would be 'marks'
Thank you for noticing. An oops can happen with more than ONE subjective phrase.
Thank you for reading...as usual, always appreciated!
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Are we all guilty of this? In our desperation to make everything old seem new... fantastic has now become the norm.
But.... fantastic anyway. Wow. My mind still boggles and isn't the first two lines just the MOST INCREDIBLE EVER?!
HA!
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What an interesting yet eerie picture to go with your duette. I'll have to get back to this one when I have more time to contemplate.
Edited on Jul 27, 3:38 p.m. because ''.
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