I casually glanced out the window,
And saw delicious sheets of rain pounding down in the darkness.
I flung myself out into the wet and
Delighted in the feel of watery kisses on my cheeks.
I wanted to share it with you so badly,
I wanted to see your hair plastered to your face,
And your cheeks split with a gigantic smile.
I called you up, my voice so filled with hope,
Only to hear a monotone voice mail, telling me
You weren't there.
I left a message begging you to come,
But you didn't show
Even though,I waited in the rain for hours.
Finally the rain stopped and the clouds cleared from the stars,
And i was still there, waiting for you.
Finally i stood up and my face was all wet,
From tears or rain, i'm still not sure.
Now the sun has come out and a new day has dawned,
But i think i'm still waiting for you.
Maybe i always will.
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Written July 26th, 2006
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I dig... very cool...
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Great job!!! I loved it... it makes me miss everyone so badly... I don't know why it just makes me think of everyone from school.. I almost want to go back.... great write! Love you so much
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This is beautiful! I always love reading your poetry! It always just hits me. I LOVE the imagrey! I love everything about this poem! Great job!!
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My word!!! You did an awesome job on this poem. When the poem was finished I wanted to read more!! You are such a gifted writer, and i feel very blessed that I can read your fantastic poetry!! Terrific job, and keep up the good work!
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Interesting. I liked the lines:
"I called you up, my voice so filled with hope,
Only to hear a monotone voice mail, telling me
You weren't there.
I left a message begging you to come,
But you didn't show
Even though,I waited in the rain for hours.
Finally the rain stopped and the clouds cleared from the stars,
And i was still there, waiting for you.
Finally i stood up and my face was all wet,
From tears or rain, i'm still not sure.
Now the sun has come out and a new day has dawned,
But i think i'm still waiting for you.
Maybe i always will."
Made me think of how love doesn't work out sometimes and the waiting in the rain for hours gives the sense of being stood up maybe. I also liked the last lines: "But i think i'm still waiting for you.
Maybe i always will."
The words almost had a haunting quality to them. Like, a ghost waiting for someone who never comes and they're just waiting around forever. Well, anyway, great write. Keep up the good work.
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