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Frosted Forgiveness

 



Home;
     cold obsidian marble
                  carved and engraved.
Offering;
        rose bouquet
                  delicately wrapped in tissue paper.





Night;
      swarmed with drunken murmurs
                                 of a known stranger.
Happiness;
          faded fragments
                     of times long since gone.





Shallow;
       self indulgence of poisonous flavors
                               obliterate rational thought.
Transformation;
            unconditional loving parent
                         to judgmental abusive lush.




Demise;
       met from tainted kisses
                        of a liquid Mistress.
Relinquish;
       decade built anger
                with a frosted forgiveness into divinity.



Author notes

Title: Frosted Forgiveness


Word Bank:  obliterate, relinquish, divinity,
           shallow, tissue paper, bouquet,
           murmur, lush, demise, faded
Written July 25th, 2006

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  • TearsintheMirror
    December 16, 2006
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    Thank you for entering and for the poem that I have to say was exquisite.


  • SonOfTheFrost
    November 11, 2006
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    this piece is unlike any i have read yet, it stands out because of its structure and meaning, an excellent write, i love the description and the method used to place your point.


  • Sunkissedrose
    July 26, 2006
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    this was a very moving piece. Sad, and angst rolled into one emotional masterpiece. Your works never cease to amaze me.
    ~Carrie

  • lenskysix
    July 25, 2006
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    Oh, sorry. I guess my computer lacks that one. x_x Apologies.

  • soulheart poet01
    July 25, 2006
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    one of the best i've read

    words cant say how well you have described the emotions of people when they die tho' i could see alot of own exsperince in there and you knew exactly of where you where coming from, i really enjoyed this peom from set out to the words not plan as the emotions feelings and thoughts where deffently not conversed by others but your own beliefs. i give you alot of credit to you for that.


  • Kari gold member
    July 25, 2006
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    Good Luck!

    This is wonderful. You did a great job with how u took the words and just made it into an amazing poem...wow great job!


  • Efflorescence
    July 25, 2006
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    Wow is almost all I can say. This is wonderful.


  • Celticmoon
    July 25, 2006
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    I appreciate your comment but for the record I did not use a Comic Sans font I actually used Monotype Corsiva; Nonetheless I thank you for taking the time to read this piece

  • lenskysix
    July 25, 2006
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    comic sans ms

    I'm not sure about others, but to me the font you used kind of shrinks the seriousness of the poem. You used colourful words and it seems like Comic Sans contradicts them. It's a picky thing, but oh well.


  • Cannonsfire
    July 25, 2006
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    Enchanted read

    A captivating piece of sorrow which is written so powerfully that it makes the reader want to envelop you. Good luck in the contest.


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    July 25, 2006
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    Oh Wow Sis...this is really very powerful....Your words capture the reader and draw them into whatever you write. I wish you luck in the contest.


    *Ktulu Blackwolfe*

  • Redtearstains
    July 25, 2006
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    OK love it love love it. fantastic, powerful and captivating. well done


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    July 25, 2006
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    Powerfully awesome, my sister girl..my word!
    Your fine talent astounds me, gf!
    All the best to you!
    Sandy


  • wings of an angel
    July 25, 2006
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    wow this is an amazing poem, very sad, I love the picture you had chosen for this piece that you had written makes the poem more heartfelt and sentiment, good luck in the contest sounds golden to me


  • July 25, 2006
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    Wow! your poem truly encompasses so many levels of sorrow and grief and combined with the photograph and your very well crafted words; this poem is mult-facted and so stark are your words that every single one of them matter. the depths to which you reveal such sadness is extremely heartfelt and it is a pleasure to read such outstanding writing~
    bless you and may you find solace in the kindness of your comments~
    lynn

  • xokatie8990ox
    July 25, 2006
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    amazing

    this poem was amazing


  • Desire gold member
    July 25, 2006
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    Sad but Needed to be Spoken!


    Oh Dang Nabbit...(did I spell that right?)
    ....runs spellcheck....
    When I first saw the picture...
    I went
    and prepared myself emotionally for what was to come..

    Bel~Thank you for sharing this and allowing us to cry alongside you!
    It takes strength to face...pain and the trail of emotions behind it!!
    Bless your Heart

    Best wishes to YOU in the contest!!
    Many blessings to YOU always!!
    and much love~ Desire~*~

  • FindingFate
    July 25, 2006
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    Wow you are all making this such a wonderful contest. Thanks so much for entering this piece and best of luck. I am going to have such a hard time judging this one...Trina


  • Frozentearz
    July 25, 2006
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    wow this has some deep meaning held within it
    I am amazed that it is from a word bank
    when I frist opend the page I felt a gasp at the picture
    and the imagery came withing your words.
    Thanks for sharing
    Love and Light
    Frozentearz


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    July 25, 2006
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    Excellant

    Incredible. What else can I say.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    July 25, 2006
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    Wow, the way your words flow acrossed the page is so captivating, such a powerful piece of sadness, yet you take one there with your words of despair. You are very gifted sweet soul, much love, and I wish you all the best in this contest. Well inscribed poetic piece indeed! -hugs-

    Your friend, Timothy


  • Lady Wolf
    July 25, 2006
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    This was very well done mom and I have quite a few friends who can relate to this poem, I can even relate to some of it because of my mothers ex and how he treated us. There's a lot of vivid imagery in this, and the words fit very well and flow together how you've woven them. The title fits it well as does the picture. I also really like the style of it that you used. Good luck in the contest! Love you!

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