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Lost Mermaid

Could you really take that?
I'm too weak to handle such..
Issues.

As I reach new territory,
Emotions unfamiliar,
Unknown,
I turn to that which I know,
Turn to my friends,
Bury myself in loving them,
Rather than accept the love I am being sent.

This course un-chartered..
My sailor no longer here to provide my support,
To cover my tail in water,
To navigate out of this storm..

And my lack of salty water,
This suffocation of oxygen.
Is killing me.
I always told myself I was strong,
And was always shown I was weak..

All I’ve worked so hard to achieve,
Wrecked in a simple storm..
I dive back,
To my ocean deep,
Drowning once more in self-misery..
Content within my comfort zone.

I know I’ll make it one day..
But for now,
I can’t put myself through that again.

Author notes

Soem people will read this and know exactly what it's about (Kami) others, including the person it mentions, will get the general jist but most prolly misread the underlying message.. If you read this, please do comment on it. It was mainly just.. a rant, set off by Kami talking quotes from the fight club. x x x
Written July 25th, 2006

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  • danceswsquirrels
    October 31, 2006
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    This suffocation of oxygen.
    Is killing me.
    freakin awesome!
    I'm sorry you let yourself out there... and then almost died... it's hard to be that vulnrable... I enjoyed reading this even if it wasn't the poem you were telling me about.. and if it's not... umm ::eyes shift left to right:: I might be lost... if you could message me the link!

    Jessa


  • Kevo MF Last
    July 26, 2006
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    I did read this, but I have no commet to make, and im not going to presume that its about me. cause chances are, knowing my running record its not. Buit if it is, I dont have you blocked on AIM, or anything else for that matter. So please feel free to message me in whichever ay you choose.

    ~Kevin~