she goes through life
living a lie
pushing her limits
one day she will die.
The little white pills,
the blue and the green
something bad will happen
that she's not yet seen.
She says she'll quit
if it poses a problem
she doesn't know it yet
but she's at rock bottom.
Everyone tells her
"you have to quit that",
but she can't just quit
at the drop of a hat.
Things in her life
has drove her this way
she uses the drugs
to take her away.
One day her son watched
as she took a pill
he stuck his hand out
she stopped and stood still.
I know that life is crazy
taking drugs is no way to be
this person I'm explaining
I hate to say, but it is me.
Author notes
This is a problem I face everyday and it is affecting my life. Its a hard problem to get over but I am doing well.With the love of my husband and kids it makes it a little easier.
Written July 25th, 2006
A contest entry
- Scars Of Your Heart by windwaker.
500 points, ended August 8, 2006, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I WANT ANYTHING! by Umi Juvariel.
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so brave of you to put your own situation into a piece like this. it must be difficult...i know its difficult...to face up to your own actions. very well done and may you be well and your family as well.
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This is a great poem about addiction. It shows through the eyes of someone who is affected the true effects of such an ordeal. The son sticking out his hand must have really been emotional to you, and I am glad that through your poetry you are able to cope.
Your rhyme was alright, and your rhythm as well. The color scheme did not hurt my eyes, which was a bonus, and I thought that for the most part, this was a very good write. Excellent job and good luck in my contest. -
brutal but honest
Great write. You draw the attention to the plight of this situation good imagery and you set up the scene playing it out in words. Then that twist and i so enjoy the twist brilliant.
Know there are many in similiar situations who have made it through to the other side 
give you strength just know you are one strong woman. You can do it. good luck in the contes.
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So touching how you write your personal life here..I can imagen how difficult life must be then..hope you and your family will doing fine.
With their love you can succeed on everything you want!!!!
Take care you,
xxJeannette
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emotional
That is a great write, I'm sorry that it's about you, that has to be traumatic, so thanks for entering and best of luck! -
Powerful
Incredibly powerful and moving piece. The struggle is such a hard one but stay strong and you will conquer it. I'm so grateful for you that you have a wonderful support system in your family. This write really shows depth in emotion and great expression. Keep on writing!! Take Care!!
~*Lori*~
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