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September's Sad State - Bronze

September’s Sad State

Was it yesterday, or last year
Or the decade before



That September was known
For the brass and brilliant flags

Waving summer goodbye?



There is a sorrow to September.


Gray billowing curtains
Escaped the brightest panes


And two hands held


Heaven


in
                          their
                                                         fall.

Author notes

there is a sadness that comes over me when i think of Septmeber....it will never be the same...
Written July 24th, 2006

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  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    July 25, 2006
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    Yes...it almost undid me, the sorrow, the horror, the most significant act of dying right before my eyes. I had never seen such nor been more personally impacted.


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    July 25, 2006
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    thank you toni.....as I have said....Fall, in its beauty, hides such beautiful dying.

  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    July 25, 2006
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    thank you Lilac Butterfly...we can not ever forget....I knwo I will remember this all the days of my lfie...that moment, when two stragners grabbed hands and lept....

  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    July 25, 2006
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    thank you, Inside and Out. forever 9/11 changed my views....that one image is burned with all the colors of fall.


  • suseann
    July 25, 2006
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    Maybe for personal reasons you find Sept. saddening. But I share in that feeling also.Beautiful poem my talented friend.~~Suseann


  • Toni A Christman
    July 24, 2006
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    This is a great poem, shewolf! LB always has the most compelling contests. I just love them because they attract beautiful and thoughtful work like your poem. I keep reading it, looking for a favorite part of the poem to quote or comment upon. I have none. The whole poem is a favorite of mine. It is excellent! Best of luck in LB's contest. Toni


  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    July 24, 2006
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    So compelling and creative - I was wondering if anyone would write about this, but I never expected that write to be so amazing and emotion filled. Your word choice is brilliant. Bravo to you and thanks for this entry... x LB


  • Inside and out
    July 24, 2006
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    This is lovely. I have never felt sadness about September until you shared your poem. Very well done! Very effective. Good luck in the contest.


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    July 24, 2006
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    thank you Lava, I was just coming to visit your poem as you sent the message.


  • jaws theme song
    July 24, 2006
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    ooooh look, I have competition, I like the gray billowing curtains and the ending is superb! great job, good luck!

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