I’ve made myself up
Crafted like an artisan
Through a series of events
Mine own hands have shaped
My face my heart my whole
As I have spun
Seemingly out of control
Well, we’ll see about that
Shall I collapse?
Is it because my walls are to thin
That they’re uneven
That I wobble this way
A tremor here
A weak spot
From an inexperienced touch?
I’ve created my life my heart my soul
To stand for what it will
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Written April 4th, 2003
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work poems were just that, poems written at work, i had to sit at a cash register for hours on end, doing very VERY little
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I like the idea behind this poem, you have come up with some very good thoughts in this.
You have "Work poem" in the title, I presume it is a piece for school work or for a course your taking. If it is it would be nice to see the requirements posted in the 'poem notes' section.
Good poem
Andrew -
Yeah, how fragile the things we we make are, including ourselves! This is a terrific, serious topic; hope you write some more on this.
In my opinion (I know, who told me to get on my soapbox
) there's too much urgency with us western folk to 'find yourself,' to get dirty with your own personality. Sure, this makes sense in a way, why let others boss you about - but I think it's also a reaction to being cut off and isolated from an early age, in a way that never used to happen.. kids with their computers, parents with long hours, jobs for life.
Like you said, when it comes to working things out, there's actually not much to work with We think we're building the Taj Mahal but, it only takes somebody to come along and push us about with their personality for the whole thing to come crumbling down. That or some external personal disaster.
Like your car breaking down,
Or doing crap in your exams.
A nice, pithy piece.
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Very different take on self..
We all shape ourselves from life experiences..we learn,we grow, or some never learn or move forward at all
I agree..it's all about choices..those bad ones can make or break us..
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I like this- funnily enough it reminds me of existentialism- the whole idea that everything you are/do is all your choice, everything about choices...
Edited on Apr 26, 7:41 p.m. because 'I like to spell correctly...'.
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great piece, I liked it...
you talk about shall I collapse?
that's a great line makes me think of what this bitch
is doing to me... -
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Thank you for your comment on Faerieheart...I really don't remember where I found the pic, I think it has been a year or two since I wrote that, I did a search on the net at that time and that is the pic that caught my fancy.
I enjoyed this, particularly that you have expressed the whole idea of self-creation, melding, molding, sculpting the self. You use fresh, personal, honest language to express some very profound ideas.
I have a song that I wrote, a long time ago that deals with this - it's about Vulcan, the blacksmith God, called Hephaestus by the ancient Greeks and what his mysteries truly mean - it's called 'At Vulcan's Forge' and you will find it in my collection "Paeans to the Solar God" - there may even be a link to the song there. Please let me know what you think. -
'I’ve created my life my heart my soul
To stand for what it will' keep standing love, we are all weak in our ways and lord knows that we need to stand for ourselves. such honesty and strength.... i am humbled by your words.
arden
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