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work poem #2- on thoughts

My thoughts echo into eternity
Their silent decibels
Ring off the walls
To come back skewed
Corrupt and fouled
By their own absurdity

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Written April 4th, 2003

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  • Broken Reflections
    April 19, 2003
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    Me liked, me liked, very nice flow, short but very creative, very nicely written, great write

    ~Broken Reflections~

  • WitchGirl
    April 9, 2003
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    cool poem...short, simple to the point
    i love the first line...it pulled me in.
    i have to agree with lunarspirit, this is the way we think too much...but sometimes the best thoughts come out of that.
    blessed be.


  • strangeillusion
    April 9, 2003
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    That really describes the way we think too much and how thoughts get all jumbled up. I like how this poem says alot without too many words...Great flow and descriptive words that create pictures...good.

  • JC Goodman
    April 4, 2003
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    There is wisdom here!

    I like this creative flow. It makes me think;where does this come from? I would guess deep thinking. It was a fast "trip" into eternity and back. Keep thinking.