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work poem #1 (vulnerable)

So here I stand,
All alone
With everyone
Staring at my imperfect form

Shaking shivers
Run through my body
Answer my obscured cries
Allow my blearied eyes to clear
Your face alone

Unanswered I sit
The only caress I feel
On my numbed cheek

Author notes

as usual all my poetry is a work in progress, tell me what i'm doing that could be improved upon
Written April 4th, 2003

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  • September 17, 2003
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    I really like this one. I am not a great poet but I think it has a good message