How often...
We neglect friends,
Family and other loved ones
When they’re alive
But if they should pass
The heart is quick
To send a wreath
To their bier
And as you cry
You wish
"I didn’t neglect them so"
Author notes
I cry every time i read this, it reminds me of my old friend who died, he inspired me.
And then i realised that he wasn't the only one i ignored, i don't know if i forgive myself but this is as close as i can get.
I often don't treat people with the respect they deserve. I treat them with the same respect that they give me. So I am filled with sorrow even further when they pass on.
Whether it be family, friend, enemy or rival, it all hurts me the same.
In a list
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What did you think
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Hey
First id like to say
this is a beautiful poem.
I really liked it.
I held this contest becasue my aunt just died not that long ago.
and i wanted to see what other people
thought and felt about ther loved ones who passed
and there love ones who are dying.
Such an amazing poem.
i really like your writing
Thanks so much for entering my contest
i hope to see some of your other poems in my upcoming contest~
~~~christina -
I like it, but i asked for at least 15 lines...so enter the other one
x
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Definitely true. We can't really take anything for granted, and your poem definitely conveys that well. Anyway, great write and good luck. ^^
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I like how this is simple, yet you poured a lot of emotion into it while still leaving room for the reader to identify a situation of their own with it.
Thanks for your entry and good luck. -
very sad
it was short and to the point it kind of gets you because of the neglect and what not but i liked it. -
a very heartfelt poem, short, but effective, this must be a very hard thing to cope with. i think that maybe if you made it longer, perhaps you could express a few more of your feelings, but thats up to you. thank you very much for your entry, and best of luck in the contest
lucy
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Quite a short, sweet poem. I'm sure everyone feels like this some time, so don't beat yourself up. I thik you could have put a bit more emotion in, but this has been done well. Thankyou for entering and good luck in my contest.
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I'm not sure if it was intentional, but I like how you shifted from second person to first person at the end. This was extremely emotion for being such a short write. Great work and best of luck in the contest.
Cheers,
Coconut
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Wow. It really makes you stop and think. I truly feel the sadness in your poem and I am grateful you brought it to my attention.
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smooth
wow, thats great I really loved your poem it had real feeling in it and I think it came from your heart. I have family memebers that are gone and feel bad some about them but I still move on....even though.Well keep going and don't stop writing I enjoyed your poem -
wow,
this is so powerful and painfully true. i'm so sorry to hear about your losses. really, i am.
much love,
crash ♥
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