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At Last

Sexual tension engendered between them
A hunger that was going to NEED to be fed
Waiting, anticipating for opportunity to knock
Then, at last
Thump, bang, pound
Chance was at their door
No words were spoke
Without delay they disappeared into the night
Alone, at last
WoW!
That first kiss
Their knees buckled
Extreme ecstasy
Tongues tangled, breathing each others breath
Giving into temptation
Self-sacrificing their bodies
Suspended in bliss
Just this once
Just tonight
Exchanging passion
Permanently burned into their mind's

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Written July 24th, 2006

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  • grm
    July 24, 2006
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    a very familiar tableau i'm sure everyone can identify with.
    nicely written, though the font color was a bit difficult to read against the background.
    thankz so much for entering


  • July 24, 2006
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    I'm thinking maybe you only need one thump, bang, pound and it would be more effective. Of course, throw out my thinking, if you want. You have entered a steamy affair! Nice with the buckling knees and tangled tongues! I appreciate you entering my first time co-hosting! Thank you much.